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noah j Member
since 2003-03-05
Posts 82on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair |
the sun sets once when i am no longer yours and i know it will do the same again 23 hours and 57 minutes later for we are in the spring and i am being reborn this is the mother in me speaking “shouldn’t hurt, you’ll live” she states in a cold raw mentality yeah i know— i think living is not the hard part i have much that i want but nothing i need i see the people walking down the street driving their cars outside my house and i cry for i am scared changes always leave me so sad even when i am the one who wanted a change the only people for me are the mad ones-mad to live, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at once--jack kerouac |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Great job here! I would suggest: "When I Am No Longer Your" or "Change" quatro |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"living is not the hard part" that's a direct quote from you and also a good titlt choice now, about change... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"Touched by Change" "Tears of Change" "23 Hours, 57 Minutes" "Born of Change" Obviously I feel "change" is the operative word here! Oh well.... Enjoyed the read, one of your most down to earth I think... jwesley |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
think about "memories of change" a nice write!! It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
23 Hours, 57 Minutes I like that... M |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
How about a long title? "Everything I Want But Nothing I Need" James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Noah: "Speedbump" xxoo |
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Lynda Member
since 2003-04-26
Posts 52Vic, Australia |
Pleased to read. Feel presumptuous to suggest title...but I'll try...How about "Change Eternal". Lynda |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nice poem... I know how it feels... for a title choice: "Changes: Then and Now" and if you think of writing a series you can call this "Changes: Then and Now #1" regards, sudhir |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I don't know what a good title would be, definitely not my domain. But "change" is the big word. And by the way I like the poem. I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Ummm..I'm never good with titles I usually stick with one liners "blah" "whatever" no j/k  Sometimes we just don't need a title..*shrugs* but anyways this one hits home..most definately..and I like littlewings response "speedbump" clever isn't she!?  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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