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Ani Zen
Junior Member

since 2003-05-08

Posts 12
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-05-15 01:18 AM

          Hanging over the ledge of the balcony,
          arms reaching out to embrace the city
          below...
          This is how I view you.
          With your heart pushing out
          into the concrete.
          Cigarette hanging in mouth,
          Eyes squinty,
          Face scrunched into a beautiful mess.
          Sometimes I think about the way you are.
          And I wonder if anything
          will ever come out of you
          in one piece.
          Instead of in shards.
          It must hurt to know
          that you're broken.
          And that everything
          inside of you
          is broken too.
          I think you know.
          I don't really know if you care.
          You seem to like
          your crazy hair,
          Your wicked laugh,
          Your gauzy voice.
          In fact I think you rather like it.
          Always taking people by surprise.
          Us never making heads or tails of you.
          It's almost an art to be you.
          But sometimes,
          in the growing wrinkles around your eyes,
          I see how much you've tired
          over the years.
          And I can see,
          by the way you sit,
          or slouch,
          or lie about,
          with your legs tangled up in knots,
          and your arms sheltering your body,
          that you have had enough.
          Maybe it's time to fix and move on.
          Maybe it's time to stop hurting,
          my little Raggedy-Anne doll.
          Your head lopsided in my hands.
          Living just to be loved
          is wearing you down.
          I'd like to love you anyway.
          But let me do it alone.
          I'll worry about the details of lonliness
          for the two of us.
          It's time for you to jump from that
          balcony,
          and land on your feet....

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-05-15 01:49 AM

interesting write!!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2003-05-15 03:21 AM

I really enjoyed this, some really cool images. Will be on the look-out for more.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-05-15 01:02 PM

Ani, I remember my Raggedy Anne and Andy dolls...a long time ago. I love the way you describe things here, awesome wording...many favorite lines in this, and I love the ending!

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

4 posted 2003-05-15 02:30 PM

there are no words to describe how this has moved me..I really really love this..and it makes me want to cry...wish someone felt this way for me or wait I wish someday I could let someone feel this way...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2003-05-15 03:38 PM

This is such a emotively honest and beautiful, heartfelt write.. You've touched a part of me that understands loving a person like this.(tortured beacon)
Superb mix of expression and imagery.
Well done...welcome to poetry land, I will definately be on the lookout for more of your work.

You're the best I've ever felt ...
it's so wrong not to be with you.
It's getting harder to stay away,
it stops my heart just to be with you.

SH

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2003-05-16 04:29 AM

Enjoyed...James

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