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A Knight In Tarnished Armour
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A Knight In Tarnished Armour |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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A sword dulled hangs loosely from my side its scabbard weathered and worn My armor gleams no more battered and tarnished by time an consequence Face ragged and lined with the memory of too many battles waged Steed weary with age and the burden of me limps slowly into the citadel Would you welcome the sight of this approach from lofty tower cell Is honour and chivalry enough to free your heart or is it the image you need |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
OMG!!! my heart just is just..uhmmm...uhhh mid air..*gasping to hold onto something* do you comprehend how much I love this poem!? screw the image! I want friggen chivalry heck I just want you lol *swoons* now thats what im talkin about dawg!  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (05-14-2003 09:51 PM).] |
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Etain Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 92The moon... |
Ethereal halo. I enjoyed it. Hello says Etain. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Is honour and chivalry enough to free your heart or is it the image you need" Hold on whilst I lower the drawbridge sire. Love this...Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Been that guy....haven't we all? And we know the answer, don't we -- sometimes one, sometimes the other, and you never know beforehand which it will be.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Now there are two words that are rustier than the armor described: honor and chivalry... I wonder if anyone appreciates those concepts anymore...? -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . and I lie awaiting holding a bouquet of flowers . . . (promise I wont peek as long as your trusty steed is not a donkey) this is beautiful and yes this approach would be welcomed with open arms and a smile beautiful writing Raph - truly xxoo |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Get ready for worse...it's all about image and to refer to a poem getting read or not on a site, if a poem doesn't have a catchy title that sadly to say creates less of an 'image' which would otherwise induce somebody to read...just my truthful opinion, however blunt, appreciate your write  |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Man, do I ever feel like you write... Face ragged and lined with the memory of too many battles waged Great job...as usual I love the smell of napalm in the morning... |
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Frank Tymon Junior Member
since 2003-05-11
Posts 27California, USA |
Ever the lament of the warrior. The cameradie of the war sustains, and in the aftermath, only memory remains. Frank Tymon |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Kris you're too much Thanks Etain Hugs thanks Nancy True Ed sigh..the life of a knight Mark one wonders but I'd like to think they still mean something Sue thanks and no not a donkey the only ass is me grin Uh thanks Ecrivan but i disagree, i've seen some horrid titles go with well read and recieved poems and many were my own Thanks Ringo appreciate the kind words FT War is harsh but love..by god that's another thing altogether |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Excellent emotive writing as usual. I feel like you, only the female version of course, I'm 23, but feel old in my glass slippers...I've gotten to the point where I believe in love so much that I've stopped believing. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Melissa I know you understand, I actually was inspired by some of the last poems you wrote..Images and expectations kill us, it scares me too, I'm always afraid that should I ever find someone, I'll just be 'settled for' because I can't meet said illusions |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you'll find someone like me who saw through the illusions a long time ago...and takes things for the beauty of what they truly are |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
great work.... most enjoyed your words today... regards, sudhir |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Dixie I'm not holding my breat waiting anymore thank you very much Sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed the thoughts...James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
who needs the image...it's the honor and heart that matter...but it is often too hard to get that point across. ~sighing~ M |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Maureen - my thoughts precisely |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Raph... I would feel that one who has fought the gallant fight, conquered the foe would reap the spoils easily... Nicely done, and mayhaps the armor is not nearly as tarnished to others as one might think.... Go for the Grail...it awaits thee. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks James Thanks M very nice thoughts Sue oh you would..grin kiddin Barry very kind words and extremely appreciated dear sir |
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Gina Culliney Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170 |
it really makes you wonder about some women who want those stiff goody white knights, don't it? Bring on the bad boys, the ones with the dulled swords and tarnished armour. Beautiful imagery as usual! Cunning and witty! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . I thought so . . . |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
so galant and honorable...and noble. great job...made me sigh :-) Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Thy armor be tarnished from thy battles ye have fought, ma lord. Welcome home to thy castle keep where ye be safe and warm once more... Peace & Love, EA |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
One of the best I've read in a while. It's not always what you wish you saw and expect to see that's the best... - Cody - |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks you Gina, What can i say women have their impossibly ridiculous images and expectations and so do men..such a silly bunch of creatures.. Sue..uhyah Thanks Kristiesue Many thanks Lady L and thanks Cowboy appreciate the compliment! [This message has been edited by Aenimal (05-20-2003 02:42 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Is honour and chivalry enough to free your heart or is it the image you need Raphey, you write such meaningful poems. Always making us think...but that's a good thing. You can tell by the amount of responses you get to your poems. You know just how to get your point across. So well, that sometimes I'm at a loss of words to say....and that's very unusual for me. (just ask anyone who really knows me!! LOL) Anyway, Raph, I personally try my best to get to know a person by what they have inside. I have seen and known many people who are very good-looking on the outside, but their insides are so horrible and ugly that they start looking ugly on the outside. And, of course, I have also known a lot of people in my life who were rather homey, but their hearts and personalites were so real and genuine that they became really beautiful people to me. I know that's the what all of us have experienced. Right? BTW, I think I've asked you this before, but I'll ask again, anyway....if that your own picture that you have under your name? If it is, could you please tell us what you think is so horrible about it? If I may say so, I don't think any of your "fans" see it....the ones of us who are getting to know the person you are inside, by your presence on here through your poems and sensitive replies to the rest of us. Sorry, I got so long-winded on your thread. I kind of make a habit of that...at times, anyway. Don't I?  Heart hugs to you, friend  Ethel |
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