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Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

0 posted 2003-04-16 06:57 PM

I've watched you as a odd spectator
watching grand drama
your celestrial highs
your hellish lows
your every forced laugh
and heard empathetically
every little cry
your brilliance orgasmic
as it fills me
making me doubt indulgent self worth

I imagine myself inside you
bathed in the warm wet
primordial abyss of thoughts
thoughts so deep
I drown at first conception
seeing the world through
your eyes
oh what a world that would be

I want to travel via mid night rail
to your the madness that is your brain
feed off your insanity
creating blasphemous
poetics
or could I dare offer a line
of mine
for a twisted mix
the stuff of prozac dreams

Oh to be you would oh so grand
to leave my body oh so plain
to you
perfection defined
but would you
exaulted one choose to be inside me
if there was ever such a choice

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

1 posted 2003-04-16 07:33 PM

Powerful words that really grab the reader.
Great job!
Eric

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-04-16 08:16 PM

Brad:

this is amazing - wonder who you are speaking of now . . . hmmmm

this was a journey indeed
xxoo

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-04-16 09:58 PM

Great write and tribute here, one small critique

"to your the madness that is your brain"

The first your a little typo other than that perfect

dreambuilder
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

4 posted 2003-04-16 10:30 PM

this reminds me of - "being John Malkovich"

great write - I always look for your poetry

. . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . .

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-04-19 02:57 PM

wow...

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

6 posted 2003-04-19 03:27 PM

I enjoyed reading your write!
>>QjQ<<
looking forward to reading more!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2003-04-19 05:39 PM

Powerful, chipped of granite, cloaked in velvet. Excellent job. ThisDiamond

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

8 posted 2003-05-03 01:36 AM

Incredible. I felt it all...
I'm keeping this one...

Sunkissed
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

9 posted 2003-05-04 07:28 AM

Definitely enjoyed this!

Sunkissed.

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