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just a junkie
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since 2003-03-04

Posts 53

0 posted 2003-05-09 10:41 PM

This is about a 7-10 day old pigeon that my daughter and I took from his nest, fed him every 4 hours, raised him up and set him free. At the time we let him go my son was very close to becoming an adult and on the day I let the bird go I wanted to write a poem producing a connection with the bird and my son "leaving the nest".

We need to talk a minute
On what happens here today
When I offer you to Mother Nature
You need to fly away
Head towards the city for
The birds that look like you
Don't look back, my little friend
They'll show you what to do
Be careful near the street
And of people who are mean
You'll encounter a lot of things
Of which you've never seen
Feed your belly when it's hungry
When you awaken each new day
Keep your feathers in condition
And don't forget to play
You're at a disadvantage
Because I took you from your nest
Please know within your heart
That my intentions were the best
Fly away my little friend
The world is now your own
I look back on the day we met
And my, how you have grown
If we ever meet again
Down the road some time
My heart will carry peace
To know that you are fine
But
If you're ever sick or lonely
No matter where you roam
Mom will always be right here
And you can come back home.

I know that this needs a LOT of work and a title may help me to fine tune it better.

Thanks
Just a Junkie

[This message has been edited by just a junkie (05-09-2003 11:21 PM).]

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-05-09 10:46 PM

I will give ya the first thing off of the top of me head--

"pinfeather's shadowing"

shrug?

smile...dunno, but it's a lovely thought and poem...

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

2 posted 2003-05-10 01:42 AM

Forever Nestled In My Heart?

I love the idea of your poem...

I'll be looking forward to seeing how it turns out...

Best of luck!

Richy

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2003-05-10 06:25 AM

I think "Letting Go" would work...james

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

4 posted 2003-05-10 08:43 AM

This is a very sweet poem and story!!!!
I very much enjoyed it!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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