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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-05-09 10:23 AM

Her eyes were tinged
A sad blue note
Held in four four time
That matched the waves
Lapping at her feet

I would have waltzed with her there,
Sand squished between toes
As wet feet became covered
Then washed with each surge,
But her eyes told me
That fragile glass beginnings
Break easily

Instead I watched
Her lost in her world
Me
Wishing she were
In mine

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-05-09 10:24 AM

You behold beautifully...
and describe tragedy with tenderness.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-05-09 10:27 AM

(smiling) I suffer an overactive imaginative disorder with symptons leading to dysfunctional descriptive passages being penned in excess of allowable norms.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2003-05-09 10:51 AM

Well these green eyes are envious; gentleness and compassion, great combo! Think he should do more than wish, for he has to admit blued beach glass is pretty and strong...no sharp edges, just soft to touch. Add a little wet kiss and see her shine.

Maybe she is not the eggshells he seems to imply.

You just don't know how to dance (waltz) as previously admitted in your other poetry.

Grins and smiles, This is a nice, lovely heartfelt poem.

Enjoyed the imagery and now I miss the beach myself.

Hugs, Pat

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-05-09 10:56 AM

LOL... you are right Pat... I don't know how to dance... and as explained above the disease I seem to be aflicted with will not let me be normal.

thanks for the comment... much appreciated.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-05-09 11:36 AM

....damn

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2003-05-09 12:16 PM

But her eyes told me
That fragile glass beginnings
Break easily

Instead I watched
Her lost in her world
Me
Wishing she were
In mine
====================

double damn ....

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2003-05-09 12:19 PM

I suffer an overactive imaginative disorder with symptons leading to dysfunctional descriptive passages being penned in excess of allowable norms.
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* moth hopes there is no cure*

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2003-05-09 12:36 PM

Ron,

How beautifully sad. You know, I had a very nice experience at the beach not too long ago. Just a walk really, but the water was beautiful and so was the company.

Susan

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2003-05-09 01:42 PM

very good, enjoyed so much

Pell
Member

since 2001-09-16

Posts 134
Pacific NW

10 posted 2003-05-09 05:03 PM

Her eyes were tinged
A sad blue note
Held in four four time
That matched the waves
Lapping at her feet

I would have waltzed with her there,

Perhaps he could change the beat- and overcome those two left feet?

(sorry lol)

What`s Normal, Ron?

ALways enjoy your writes, this one is no exception.

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

11 posted 2003-05-09 05:14 PM

Having had several moments like this in my life, I appreciate this poem greatly.

Thank you.

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