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Martie
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0 posted 2003-05-02 08:12 PM



The Other Place

Maybe once
we could fold into each other
and find another place
beyond what we are,
where there would be no measure
only melting.

I am one thought in time.
The sea does not feel
my toes dangling,
the sun moves always
into another daybreak,
the turning world
holds me to her
for reasons of her own.

That precious footprint
cannot sustain itself,
consumed by minutes
it is gone.

Maybe once
we could find another way
of knowing,
glimpse beyond
one separate thought
find that other place
where there would be no measure
only melting.
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10-3-99



© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-05-02 08:15 PM



When this was written,
I knew of you,
but didn't know you...
now I know you...

but I'm still in awe...

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2 posted 2003-05-02 08:20 PM


Your writing is just that, measureless.
It is a soft caress that melts my heart time and again.

Love your touch Martie gal~

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3 posted 2003-05-02 08:22 PM


I am one thought in time.
The sea does not feel
my toes dangling,
the sun moves always
into another daybreak,
the turning world
holds me to her
for reasons of her own

Ah yes, Martie....this is another wonderful piece of your heart. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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4 posted 2003-05-02 08:22 PM


this wasn't written in l999...I posted it here then...it was written in the 70's sometime...but is sort of timeless, I think.  Thanks Karilea and Lori and hugs to you both.
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5 posted 2003-05-02 08:23 PM


"When this was written,
I knew of you,"

...

weren't you that girl there,
just on the corner...
waving at me?



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6 posted 2003-05-02 08:26 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Martie, this is lovely, sweet friend, I always dream of finding other places and that I can share them to the children too who make such things possible! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shien upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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7 posted 2003-05-02 08:29 PM


WOW!  Timeless is right....you never cease to amaze me.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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8 posted 2003-05-02 08:40 PM




Oh Martie,

After the first stanza, I thought this is it, this is the best this poem can possibly get... well, silly me...the entire poem is just so special and sensitive and no words to describe how incredible I find it, Martie, this one really touches me....so well written..timeless and universal...

Thank you so much for sharing it.

Hugs and love, Pat  



..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (05-02-2003 08:42 PM).]

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9 posted 2003-05-02 08:45 PM


Maybe once
we could fold into each other
and find another place
beyond what we are,
where there would be no measure
only melting.

.....and what could be better, more worthy than to find such a place? You have a gift, Martie, a true gift. Thank you for sharing.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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10 posted 2003-05-02 09:51 PM


You express your soul into such tender dew drops Martie. I am always humbled by the depth you put to write. TD
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11 posted 2003-05-05 12:06 PM


I am one thought in time.
The sea does not feel
my toes dangling,
the sun moves always
into another daybreak,
the turning world
holds me to her
for reasons of her own.

I really don't have a favorite verse... this entire poem is pure perfection. *S* But I do love the perspective of these lines... and when I read how long ago it was written, I know the "seeing" of Martie's eyes isn't a new thing... but how it is treasured. *S*

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12 posted 2003-05-05 12:20 PM


Martie
I found that place in a dream, beautiful write.

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13 posted 2003-05-06 09:56 AM


Martie - wonderful words that are timeless and take me on journeys of wonder - Paul
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14 posted 2003-05-07 02:28 PM


A timeless piece indeed, glad you shared it with us here!!

Charisma

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15 posted 2003-05-07 04:56 PM


Excellent!
Eric

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16 posted 2003-05-07 05:34 PM


MartieSis~
Can you hear my *sighs* ?

Such feeling in this write~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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17 posted 2003-05-07 09:01 PM


My God, Martie, this is amazing, so beautiful.  I always feel at peace wearing 'Martie eyes.'  I thank you for being a poet, I'm in awe of this.  I deem this a keeper!

Melissa

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18 posted 2003-05-07 09:31 PM


You weave a magical place of dreams with your words....Stunning...

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19 posted 2003-05-07 11:40 PM


Martie - wouldn't it be great if one could find another way at times...

BC

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20 posted 2003-05-25 04:28 AM


how'd this slip past?
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21 posted 2004-08-03 10:46 PM


I think you're approaching the same thought that I am with this Martie.  In thinking about language, and the isness of 'what is' -- Derrida and Heidigger tickled something in my brain and then Whorf's (um, no not the Whorf from Star Trek) relativity of linguistics all sort of jelled at once... and I was thinking it's the words themselves (which are all metaphors - representations of something else - they are -- but they aren't) that keep us in the dark as we're attempting to understand what they mean.

Pretty complicated plot to just say I miss somebody... but, um, poetry.  

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22 posted 2005-03-02 05:13 PM


Maybe once
we could fold into each other
and find another place
beyond what we are,
where there would be no measure
only melting.

Maybe once
we could find another way
of knowing,


Your words always make me sigh Martie.



Mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

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