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Open Poetry #26

An Insomniac Walk

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-05-02 09:50 AM

Warm nights need not my leather
To protect me from the chill weather
So I leave it home as I roam the byways,
My mind goes farther than I travel
And seeping dark thoughts prevail
With the sadness stalking in darkness walking alleyways
Flashing red and blue streak quickly by
As a new widow begins a moaning cry
As lives are spilling on the speed killing highways.
There is still a coldness to the night
Despite the warmth of breezes light.

It is a walk of wandering lacking smiles
As new destruction of row homes makes pile
Mounds of crushed red bricks and two by four sticks broken
The reduction of gone lives and home abandon
In an afternoon those memories are done
A generation or two of people I once knew now forsaken,
There’s nothing left of the families once there
As if the simply vanished into the night air
Where was their home is crushed gray stone, alls taken,
There is cold stillness to this midnight
Where gone are memories from sight.

Gloom

davidmerriman
Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 123
Dallas, TX

1 posted 2003-05-02 12:16 PM

i liked some of the verses, although i am not really feeling the flow of the poem, nor the rhymes.

keep working on it and polishing it.

quatro
Member

since 2003-04-29

Posts 392
Galveston, Texas

2 posted 2003-05-02 12:26 PM

I'm not familiar with the flow, but the picture is vividly gloomy. Was that your intent?

Very Intersting write.

quatro

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