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Frozen In Time

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

0 posted 2003-04-23 12:49 PM

In between the worlds,
where the soulless dwell.
Destiny has wrought
a timeless spell.
Shifting along the edges
of forbidden truths,
Frozen forever
in the hands of deceit,
The heart feels no more,
Emptiness now it bleeds.

Will you... ...

Walk me away,
from this ancient path,
and lead me farther off,
from the shadows of my tears,
and seek out,
that lone star in the night,
and pray,
it'll lead once again,
back into the light.

[This message has been edited by Verve (04-23-2003 12:53 PM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2003-04-23 02:03 PM

good write

wings of the moon
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land

2 posted 2003-04-23 03:50 PM

A beautiful poem

my one suggestion is to change the last word to add strength to it.

your words have touched me deeply....

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

3 posted 2003-04-23 03:52 PM

very nice write, well written

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

4 posted 2003-04-23 11:19 PM

Very nice......
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

5 posted 2003-04-25 07:28 PM

Nice!

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