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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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We picnicked upon boulders cross-legged and triangular feeding the hunger from the roots of our bellies sun-soaked and drying like clothes on a line abandoned to the touch of November. Watching green we listened for tomorrows we laid out our yesterdays and spilled laughter into the stream. The sun spewed yellow in her resentfulness flushing our faces and bleaching our hair: Loneliness crinkled upon her lips. We dipped our toes and shrilled with excitement tadpoles once more became an interest lizards looked on in amazement as I did through the camera lens at my friends lapping up the pink of day. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely told...strong imagery and a nice flow to the words... left me with a quiet feeling..and a subtle hint of sensuality.. very nice work.. I enjoyed |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done, Maree... I'm sitting here listening to the SOUNDS this employs... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--I feel like I was there with you, sure would have liked to have been. Such a good feeling this poem has! How about a hug and a vote? |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) I love the colors in this, sweet friend, you have to soak up those rare foreseen colors as that is where so much beauty rests! (kiss on cheek) I love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
This is so lovely! Especially: "Watching green we listened for tomorrows we laid out our yesterdays" Yes  When you think you have heard it all, |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Yes this is lovely. Joyce |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A bit of "happy" from your pen---YES. Yer one luscious poet, yanno...  |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Maree, another master stroke of your pen onto the page. A wonderful write.  [This message has been edited by WhiteRose (03-21-2003 08:03 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Maree, A chance for growth, I'll bet. Nicely done. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
One of my favourites--glad you chose to submit it Mmy. JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh this is SO lovely...and yes... happy!! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Maree, i like to look through those camera lens too...pity about the sun though.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maree, this is a beautiful poem about a beautiful tme with friends. I really enjoyed it and it has my vote.  "Love makes the world go around" ~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-22-2003 10:30 AM).] |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Maree, Amazing what those camera lenses can see isn't it? Dawn |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
My vote's included here |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
This is a very impressive write, I loved it and voted on it. Love reading all these great writes. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"The Pink of the Day" I loved it. |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
I felt like I was there with you,Maree! My tootses are wet! Looking forward to Spring,Geoffrey If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
A visual delight. Thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Watching green we listened for tomorrows we laid out our yesterdays and spilled laughter into the stream. The sun spewed yellow in her resentfulness flushing our faces and bleaching our hair: Loneliness crinkled upon her lips. ================================== LOVE that verse...the imagery and the personification are very cool!! love the last line too! Your poet's eye captured as much as your photographer's eye well done poetess Maree. "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Maree! Definitely one for the book! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Oh, it's much more than a subtle sensuality in this piece of waking and waiting. Yum. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My attention was captured by the title... and every word made me a more willing prisoner to your images... I was THERE. *S* Wonderful work!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Cpat thank you so much for your lovely reply; happy that you enjoyed. Sunshine Thanks sweetie  Martie I would have loved for you to have been there..you would've loved it. I'm always up for one of yor hugs Martie and thanks for the vote. hugs back. Noah, So glad you enjoyed sweet one. Thank you. Chanson Thank you so very much Joyce Thank you for stopping by and am happy you liked. Hey Sen.. Yep a happy poem, they find themselves over to me occasionally heh. Thank you Gorgeous Ms Rose Thank you for your always lovely replies m'dear. Larry indeed, yes indeed. Thank you! Jamie One of my favourites too m'friend.. I remember our discussion on this poem and how you advised me to remove "rocks" heh.. thanks Enchantress... thank you Kaile, yes pity about the sun indeed. Thank you. garysgirl.. thank you for stopping by and having a read, and for your lovely reply and vote. much appreciated. Dawn... yep amazing indded. thank you. Ruthie... thank you baby hugsFlowr.. Hi... and thank you very much for your lovely reply and yor vote. Susan... Thank you so very much. Geoffrey...so glad you enjoyed m'friend. *hugs* SPIRIT..You're most welcome and Thank you. JM.. you always humble me with your lovely replies dear lady. I thank you. Denise... thank you. bsquirrel, glad you enjoyed it and thank you. Suthern... so glad you were able to make it...Thank you so much for your lovely reply. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Enjoyed this a lot.....The title caught me and drew me in!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Maree~ What a nice snapshot this was, the surroundings are so life like and all. Good job with the special effects. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Just found this...I'm liking it... huggles..  K |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Watching green we listened for tomorrows we laid out our yesterdays and spilled laughter into the stream. I could feel your words...brought me a smile of memory ~A~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"cross-legged and triangular feeding the hunger from the roots of our bellies sun-soaked and drying like clothes on a line abandoned to the touch of November." ________________ And what a photograph your pen takes..I could envision, hear and feel every word...I'm in awe of this! This definately deserves to be in the book Melissa~ |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A tale told as only Maree can do... Very nicely done, m'friend... BTW - My niece is officially a temporary Aussie now... She's loving it... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ I REALLY like it~ Glad the polling booths are open on Sunday here~  Now, take a gander at this - Your thoughts seem to mirror my reflections caught in the camera lens~ /pip/Forum39/HTML/001720.html *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Dark Angel~ Very up lifting poem of happy days spent with friends.Enjoyed...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you all so very much, I've been away in the last 4 days and it's nice to returns to your lovely comments and support. hugs Maree |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
yes, yes, YES wonderful poem... wonderful choice... lapping up this one.... regards, sudhir |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
sounds like a very lovely day! :-) Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sudhir... thank you m'friend Kristie Sue...yes it was a beautiful day. Thank you both for your lovely reply. Maree |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I smiled at this one. I could see it and feel it. I love the way you use language in it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
excellent imagery, well done. well done indeed. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I wish I had gotten to this delightful poem sooner but better late than never! I am pleased that it made it into Reflections. I truly enjoy poetry such as this. It is a feel good read...and you have me eagerly anticipating summertime--picnics and times at the beach with my friends..."just lapping up the pink of the day". Love & Light, EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (04-03-2003 06:29 PM).] |
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