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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-03-21 02:34 PM

Too much.
S
   I
      M
          P
             L
                Y
Angled thoughts again
Incline a steep stair
I must climb
O
   R
      N
          O
              T
Why is it that in such hours
As leave us with a vacant tread

Unheard
    Missing
       No longer here
We know not the comfort
of another’s arm
To lean on,
   since severed
       From the shoulder of us
          the ghosted hands of were
            can not entwine fingers
               or wipe tears

The sky is in break
    And squeezed drops
          fall cold
             On promised spring

Too Much
              This old ache

Too little
            These
                      Words

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (03-21-2003 04:33 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-03-21 02:40 PM

(big hugggsssssss) There's no comfort in being adjacent to anything except on a straight surface, and it seems we are constantly being forced to play Chutes and Ladders nowadays and hope soon we can call it quits and everybody wins! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much, you have my vote! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

2 posted 2003-03-21 02:54 PM

would love to see this one in the book

Charisma

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2003-03-21 03:21 PM

Your poetry keeps me either sighing or crying or both. Though I am partial to your poem "Failing Words" I am still voting for this and hope both get voted in.

You have a way of touching like no other.

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

4 posted 2003-03-21 03:23 PM

We know not the comfort
of another’s arm
To lean on,
   since severed
       From the shoulder of us
          the ghosted hands of were
            can not entwine fingers
               or wipe tears

The sky is in break
    And squeezed drops
          fall cold
             On promised spring

Too Much
              This old ache

Too little
            These
                      Words

This is exquistie Ron, simply beautiful in flow and word. A caress of verse, enjoyed.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2003-03-21 03:26 PM

You surprised me with this'n Cap...thoughtful structure to match your talent.

Anybody ever tell you that you are gently intense? Sure they have...

grin...I vote!

Poet deVine

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Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 2003-03-21 03:32 PM

Simply excellent. I love the way you formatted this - it sets off your content. I'm happy to vote for this...

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-03-21 04:04 PM

Capt. Ron, I echo everything everyone else said.

In other words...I vote

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2003-03-21 04:50 PM

Ron I love the format; it suits the content of your poem and as always an excellent write. Would love to see it in the book.

Maree

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-03-21 05:02 PM

You know what I think about this one.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-03-21 05:41 PM

Ron....I know this feeling:

"Too Much
              This old ache

Too little
            These
                      Words"

and I vote for the way you said it.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-03-21 06:59 PM

Ron...a MUST for the book!

~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~

Thomas119gold
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since 2002-06-03

Posts 708
Biloxi, MS (city by the sea)

12 posted 2003-03-21 07:52 PM

I
L
  i
   k
    e

      i
       t

Thomas

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

13 posted 2003-03-21 10:48 PM

ALOT your words

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

sweetwater
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since 2002-12-16

Posts 178
Perth

14 posted 2003-03-22 01:53 AM

visually superb
enjoyed every word.

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

15 posted 2003-03-22 06:23 AM

Ron,
i like the way you wrote this..thought "the ghosted hands of were" was simply delightful...will try to incorporate your technqiue (using verbs as nouns) in my future work

you don't have your email listed so i can't write a personal email..forgive me for intruding on your space...i really want to thank you for your comments to my "For my younger brother"...you really hit it on the nail and practically said out everything i feel but am not quite willing to conceptualise yet...i was hence grateful for your words as they allowed me to confront a reality...

still struggling to initate contact with my brother and i guess my path will be not be as arduous since i have your understanding...Bless you!

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

16 posted 2003-03-22 06:25 AM

i'm confronting my ignorance first

...what does "ornot" or "tonro" mean? how should i read it?

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

17 posted 2003-03-22 06:58 AM

Unheard
    Missing
       No longer here
We know not the comfort
of another’s arm
To lean on,
   since severed
       From the shoulder of us
          the ghosted hands of were
            can not entwine fingers
               or wipe tears

The sky is in break
    And squeezed drops
          fall cold
             On promised spring

Too Much
              This old ache

Too little
            These
                      Words
==============================

careful poet sir--your diversity is showing

so is your depth ... and your talent..
Yeppers...ya better be careful or somone is gonna figure out youre a poet with a gifted pen

The Sun The Moon The Stars The Sky
none of these would my love deny.
For of all the true found in the blue
its twice as much that I love you.

jm

Sunkissed
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

18 posted 2003-03-22 10:36 AM

Let me add my vote.

Sunkissed.

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

19 posted 2003-03-22 06:39 PM

Well JM already quoted what I would've, so see above for my favorite part.

I wasn't crazy about this the first time I read it but I came back today and it's grown on me! lol

SPIRIT
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Posts 1745
California Desert

20 posted 2003-03-22 09:23 PM

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

21 posted 2003-03-22 09:27 PM

I took away from this great comfort.....heart hugsss.....

Lauren~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

22 posted 2003-03-22 09:32 PM

This is certainly a new slant on a familiar topic...and you do it excellently

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

23 posted 2003-03-23 01:05 AM

Dunno which I like more, the concept or its execution. Excellent work.

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

24 posted 2003-03-23 03:56 AM

Very exquisite work here.

Dawn

SimplyGold
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since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

25 posted 2003-03-23 03:52 PM

Cptat Hair,

I concur with all who have commented before me. Excellent, as usual.

SG

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

26 posted 2003-03-24 10:57 AM

You already know how I feel about this piece.
But I needed to vote!!!

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

27 posted 2003-03-24 12:59 PM

I said "oh cool" out loud at your ending. You never have a problem with endings, do you? Lucky guy.

Like the stairs-formatting, especially considering they go down rather than up. Nice touch. You're good at this, Ron, have I ever told you that?

Here's my vote.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

28 posted 2003-03-25 03:49 PM

That was like a punch to the gut, but lovingly.

You rock.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

29 posted 2003-03-26 12:17 PM

You found the words... this just aches... and is just wonderful. *S*

christian
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

30 posted 2003-03-27 04:28 PM

no need for my comments, i dont deserve
to praise your work. it just shines
on its own.

click click.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

31 posted 2003-03-27 06:02 PM

dgvarner
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Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

32 posted 2003-03-27 06:11 PM

can feel the anguish of having no comfort...

well written..enjoyed..

hugs, g

"laughter is the shortest distance between two people" - victor borge

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

33 posted 2003-04-03 10:43 AM

bump

NewEnglandlazurlu
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Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

34 posted 2003-04-03 12:18 PM

Ron, this is definitely getting my vote. Wonderful and I loved the style.

Hugs for peace, Marti

Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

35 posted 2003-04-03 12:20 PM

This poem is awesome, and very worthy of being in Reflections.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

36 posted 2003-04-03 12:33 PM

As I followed the graceful decent of your words, I found myself falling--and I ended up landing on terra ferma with my feathers crumpled!---but your poem was still worth the read!--and then some!

I enjoy the softness-with-an-edge style of your writing.

Love & Light,
Linda

Susan Caldwell
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Posts 8348
Florida

37 posted 2003-04-03 01:13 PM

I love this. Voted.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

38 posted 2003-04-03 09:51 PM

Your words are always worth it!!

Are you taking a vacation or what?

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

39 posted 2003-04-04 08:19 PM

This is very unusual. I've read it three times and got something different from it each time.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

40 posted 2003-04-05 06:51 AM

bump

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

41 posted 2003-04-05 08:03 AM

Aye, Aye, Cap'n Ron...

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

42 posted 2003-04-05 08:03 AM

This is a great description of an ancient ache. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

43 posted 2003-04-05 10:26 AM

Ron,

wonderful work! i loved the presentation
of this, really lovely! hope it gets into
the book!
take care
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

44 posted 2003-04-05 11:58 AM

great work this.... Ron, I think you know how much you are admired...

regards,
sudhir

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

45 posted 2003-04-06 02:48 PM

thought I voted for this one

guess I am getting a bit forgetful in my old age..

liked it, I did
hugss
M

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29

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California Desert

46 posted 2003-04-06 10:21 PM

Just in here
Bumpity bumping.

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

47 posted 2003-04-06 11:23 PM

Cpat Hair - yes, this one is in... My vote...

BC

suthern

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Louisiana

48 posted 2003-04-08 02:22 PM

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

49 posted 2003-04-08 02:58 PM

I missed this? Wow Ron you are sure like a diamond (not in the rough) - my goodness of course you get my vote.

To be hugged by a friend is wealth beyond words.

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

50 posted 2003-04-09 02:34 PM

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

51 posted 2003-04-09 03:29 PM

Thank you all... one and all.. individually some of you know me better than others..to those that do know me I say, the comfort of having been a part of such a group of people is rewarding and something I will not easily set aside.. to those that don't know me.. well.. there are few honors bestowed on us as individuals that in any way touch us as much as being recognized by peers... to have so many of the poets here comment on a piece of mine and to bump it back up a list.. is an honor that touches me deeply..

thank you

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