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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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4 Seasons When summer is here, all is settled except the missing spring breeze. When mild wind caresses my face, I wonder why it hasn't set me free. When snow coats all earth, I think of lying on her sleeves as my white pillow. Yet she brings a strand of loneliness that chills my heart. When autumn leaves paint colors for me, I feel beauty surrounds me. But when I see the falling leaf, the brown feather recalls my withering dreams, and mirth of my past floating in mist. (c)Mar 23, 2002 Eliza Simmons Side Note: BTW, which submittion of mine is better? This one or "Rush" I like both of them  Just curious. How many of you this is a second read? hehe guess it was too long ago ay.~Every girl has a dream within. [This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (02-20-2003 02:15 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Don't remember it, but love the angst and beauty of it. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
It is as beautiful as ever. Joyce |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Eliza, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this made me smile as I love both this poem and Rush, I'd say I have no perference because I love the imagery in both so much, you paint gorgeous just like Vivaldi and Van Gogh, God Bless You, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eliza, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
There are four seasons why I like this poem... Warm hugs, EA |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
"...I think of lying on her sleeves as my white pillow..." And "...But when I see the falling leaf, the brown feather recalls my withering..." These two images are especially striking. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Has a nice natural feel to it, a good theme of nature and the passing of time, very good work |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I like both poems, but I did like "Rush" the best because of the images of the moving masses of people that it left in my mind. This poem is much more subtle and melancholy and has a whole different feel to it. But, like I said, I like them both and both got my vote. Good job. -Bob |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very lovely.. good choice for the book. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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ThunderMage Senior Member
since 2002-06-20
Posts 812Canada |
Definitely worth a vote. What is life without poetry and adventure? |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Love this -  - My vote is in. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
striking images in this one... great work... regards, sudhir |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is realy beautiful...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The title caught my eye - as where I live is called "the city of four seasons". Certainly glad it did, or I wouldn't have found this gem. Very well done. JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
my first read, but certainly not my last...this is fantastic |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very nice submission and I liked Rush as well. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I liked "Rush" but prefer this. I like the touch of bittersweet about wanting the season, but missing what it does'nt have. Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Haven't read the other yet, but I ditto exactly what Chanson said. enjoyed a great deal. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dense old me, but I didn't find spring. I like the point/counterpoint for each season. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wonderful poem. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
I like both your submissions for different reasons...i like the different take on seasons i got from this...one always reads poems singing praises to the beauty of the 4 seasons and so i enjoyed the darker tone of 4 Seasons and the melancholy it inspired...i like Rush however because of its theme..fate/destiny happens to be one of my favourite topics..(i used to be known as faterider in these forums until i changed it to kaile) hope this reader's reaction is useful |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Beautiful. You have this gal's vote. "Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me." |
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