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catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2003-02-19 06:08 PM

Oh love what hast thou done to me?
Improbable, thy seeming chill
when once such heat did perpetrate
thy game of hearts upon my will.

Oh love, what chocolate bittersweet
has found its way unto thy heart?
Though velvet melt did beckon me
thy action hast torn us apart.

Oh love, what falsity is this?
thou protestations be unclear
for words once penned with silken lies
have come to show me naught but tears.

Oh love, shall this our ending be
with coolest nod and shadowed eye?
No longer hast thou need of me
abandoned thus, I bid goodbye.

[This message has been edited by catalinamoon (02-20-2003 11:49 AM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-02-19 06:27 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sandra, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, this is very sad and I send angel hugs to comfort you as I know again love will croon faithfully to you, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

2 posted 2003-02-19 10:53 PM

Damn Sandra!

You write this well...well.

Ed

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-02-19 11:18 PM

So sad yet beautifully penned.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-02-19 11:22 PM

Beautifully done Sandra...good choice!
Gets my vote!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2003-02-20 12:14 PM

Oh love what hast thou done to me?
Impropable, thy seeming chill
when once such heat did perpetrate
thy game of hearts upon my will
=================================

rhymes divine...lovely poetess Sandra

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ... it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

6 posted 2003-02-20 06:51 AM

Dear Sandra, love the old style here, it was wonderful, thanks for the sharing.

Sincerely
Rick

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2003-02-20 07:03 AM

Beautiful phrasing ... and wonderful meter, Sandra. Excellent!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2003-02-20 08:56 AM

Oh, my! This was exquisite! I read it twice to double my pleasure--mind you, it didst mist mine eyes..

Warm hugs,
Linda

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

9 posted 2003-02-20 09:07 AM

GREAT!!!!

Bridgette

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

10 posted 2003-02-20 09:24 AM

Your meter and rhyme in this piece are wonderful. Such a sad tale of loss. Well deserving of print

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2003-02-20 02:12 PM

You are a master at writing the landscape of the jilted -- and though it might not be a barrel of laughs for ya, I always enjoy your insights into the state of bein' alone.

Mikey

ThunderMage
Senior Member

since 2002-06-20

Posts 812
Canada

12 posted 2003-02-20 06:43 PM

Describes my life before I met Julie.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!
We do not stop playing because we grow ol

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

13 posted 2003-02-20 07:47 PM

Sad,......and well written.I enjoyed this.
Jason

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

14 posted 2003-02-20 07:51 PM

Beeeeautiful! *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

15 posted 2003-02-20 08:06 PM

A lovely sad poem. Joyce

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

16 posted 2003-02-20 09:11 PM

You do loss very well, Sandra...vote's in

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

17 posted 2003-02-23 06:08 AM

beautiful penned

Charisma

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

18 posted 2003-02-23 08:54 AM

How well you use the ancient
style...beautiful poetry and sad...better to wait for the best, of which you richly deseve! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

19 posted 2003-02-25 12:42 PM

Sandra,

This is a very sad poem. I'm sorry you are or have had to go through this. Either way it'll be a great submission to the book.

Dawn

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

20 posted 2003-02-25 01:57 PM

nice

~Every girl has a dream within.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

21 posted 2003-02-25 02:07 PM

oh, yes....

regards,
sduhir

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

22 posted 2003-02-25 02:30 PM

Lovely Sandra dear one. This gets my vote! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

23 posted 2003-02-25 05:44 PM

Sandra,

you are getting too good at this style of
poetic rejection....

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

24 posted 2003-02-26 08:36 AM

A bittersweet yet love-ly piece...

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

25 posted 2003-02-26 10:13 AM

Oh yes, and this is perfect!! Especially loved the texture of the second verse, addicted to chocolate as I am! Great one to add, lil sis!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

26 posted 2003-02-26 10:27 AM

'Oh love, what chocolate bittersweet
has found its way unto thy heart?
Though velvet melt did beckon me
thy action hast torn us apart.'

Oh Sandra, you've outdone yourself! Beautiful piece here!

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

27 posted 2003-02-26 10:35 AM

Sandra,

This is the first of your poetry I've read. So very well written and heart touching. Now, I need to go find others which you've written; sure I'll not be disappointed.

Enjoyed greatly, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

28 posted 2003-02-27 12:50 PM

Sandra,
I like this so much! Voting now.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

29 posted 2003-02-27 01:03 AM

catalinamoon - lovely as always, my vote...

BC

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

30 posted 2003-02-27 02:26 AM

Yet another that I was sure I had voted on. My name's not on the list, so I must have not...

I have now!!!

Hugs,
Ethel

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

31 posted 2003-02-27 02:32 AM

Sandra~
This is just perfect...an excellent choice for submission.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

32 posted 2003-02-27 03:46 PM

An excellent ode to love lost. *S*

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

33 posted 2003-02-27 07:15 PM

enjoyed

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

34 posted 2003-03-02 05:10 AM

I don't know how I missed this....love it.

Maree

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

35 posted 2003-03-02 05:24 AM

A lovely love poem. My vote too.

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

36 posted 2003-03-02 07:06 AM

Very beautiful!
Perfectly executed
It flows like melted chocolate!
Liz

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

37 posted 2003-03-02 07:07 AM

Very beautiful!
Perfectly executed
It flows like melted chocolate!
Liz

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

38 posted 2003-03-02 11:52 AM

Ah yes the other side of love. What with valentine's day surely there should also be a day devoted to the ending of romance..yunno

Roses are red violets are blue
I loved you once but gooooood I hate you..

could have cards and everything. sigh don't mind me I'm just a little heartless and insane

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