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Martie

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0 posted 2003-02-18 10:12 PM

I Talk to the Woods Denuded
(in memory of Michelle)

I talk to the woods denuded
not pine or cone just black stark trunks illusion
grants me foot within
the wandering of my spirit
to see small grasses mostly weed though sweet
and tufts of rocks that fall into the clearing
like a memorial of what used to be
to cover the char that once was tree

I picture the woman she would be
on curve of time this road I take
to bring her sharper to my senses
with long brown hair by sun made to flame
and eyes the color of a wooded glen
stem brown skin and toes mostly open
from barefooted time that she would spend

I remember her love for wild and free
the sound of coyote almost cock of head
to hear from back yard pass the curl of scent
that travels bent within the nape of years
from someplace beyond this single web
she was open this way in her life as now when dead

and that is why this trail is not of sorrow
but hallow in the path it takes to certain sure
to find the lifting up of missing her is born
from a life never forsaken always worn and mostly now
the month when she stopped and winter became real
I feel her keen within continuations cycle
for every sigh I lift she with love heals

[This message has been edited by Martie (02-18-2003 10:14 PM).]

Janet Marie
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1 posted 2003-02-18 10:24 PM

it just wouldnt be a passions book with out Michelle in it.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ... it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

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2 posted 2003-02-18 10:27 PM

I echo JM.

Absolutely beautiful Martie. .an excellent choice.

You know you have my vote.

,aree.

Paul Wilson

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3 posted 2003-02-18 10:28 PM

Martie~ Touching words from your heart.

Enjoyed this last stanza so much.

and that is why this trail is not of sorrow
but hallow in the path it takes to certain sure
to find the lifting up of missing her is born
from a life never forsaken always worn and mostly now
the month when she stopped and winter became real
I feel her keen within continuations cycle
for every sigh I lift she with love heals

To heal may take a lifetime, one day at a time as memories bring a smile too your heart...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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4 posted 2003-02-18 10:32 PM

"picture the woman she would be
on curve of time this road I take
to bring her sharper to my senses
with long brown hair by sun made to flame
and eyes the color of a wooded glen
stem brown skin and toes mostly open
from barefooted time that she would spend"

I don't know about your Michelle, but, it would seem the world is now missing a special spirit.

A fine rememberance!

Ed

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5 posted 2003-02-18 10:37 PM

This is beautiful. It gets my vote.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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6 posted 2003-02-18 10:42 PM

(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I know with all my heart your Michelle will always be guiding you with her love and her whisper will be the sweet soothing zephyr and the gentle butterfly kisses her hugs! (wipes tears) I send many angel hugs of healing your way, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2003-02-18 11:13 PM

Yes....it's all I can say.

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8 posted 2003-02-18 11:19 PM

Your heart is beautiful, Martie,
and it touches mine deeply.
Love and hugs to you,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (02-18-2003 11:21 PM).]

garysgirl

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9 posted 2003-02-18 11:41 PM

This has to go in the book....

hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 2003-02-19 12:07 PM

And forever she will live in your writing, for you have given her life in your words

ecrivan
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11 posted 2003-02-19 12:42 PM

A definite asset to an anthology...always impressed by your vivid descriptiveness

christian
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12 posted 2003-02-19 01:30 AM

i think you should put 'come, february'
in the collection. i love that one. i love
this one too though, oh so many choices,
whatever! :smirk:

Mysteria

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13 posted 2003-02-19 02:06 AM

And I agree - would not be "Reflections" without a reflection on Michelle now would it?

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Severn
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14 posted 2003-02-19 02:54 AM

hugs MLP..hugs and votes..

K

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15 posted 2003-02-19 03:05 AM

hugs to you Martie...

such a splendid write...

regards,
sudhir

Nan

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16 posted 2003-02-19 08:01 AM

Your reflections are ours to share... a small step within your wonderfully poetic mind, m'friend...

winston
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17 posted 2003-02-19 08:17 AM

"char that was once tree" and the rhyming of "glen" with "open" stands out. Overall, the poem reads well. The last line seems a bit cumbersome.
Got my vote.
Thanks.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
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18 posted 2003-02-19 12:14 PM

My heart hugs ya dearPoetFriend...
An absolute treasure of a read...
*~coco~*

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19 posted 2003-02-19 01:19 PM

Lovely Martie - happy to vote for this poem - Paul

Andrew Scott
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20 posted 2003-02-19 01:41 PM

Another page in the book to you Lady Martie. A most enjoyable read

Chanson
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21 posted 2003-02-19 01:50 PM

You've taken this reader
on a journey, reflective and
exhilarating at the same
time.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

bsquirrel

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22 posted 2003-02-19 05:19 PM

Power, passion, loss and forest. What else is there?

SEA

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with you

23 posted 2003-02-19 09:46 PM

Martie,
I don't quite know what to say, except, this is so very beautiful...

Martie

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24 posted 2003-02-20 10:25 AM

Thank you, friends, for the heart touching replies. Michelle was very special, I'm happy to share her with you in this way.

Charisma

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25 posted 2003-02-21 04:19 PM

Treat to read, enjoyed it a lot

Charisma

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26 posted 2003-02-21 06:59 PM

'and that is why this trail is not of sorrow
but hallow in the path it takes to certain sure
to find the lifting up of missing her is born
from a life never forsaken always worn and mostly now
the month when she stopped and winter became real
I feel her keen within continuations cycle
for every sigh I lift she with love heals'

I've read this several times and each time, this line...

'the month when she stopped and winter became real'

...has stopped my heart. Truly remarkable Martie.

Joyce Johnson

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27 posted 2003-02-21 08:15 PM

Truly beautiful Marti. Joyce

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28 posted 2003-02-24 01:07 AM

I didn't comment on this poem the first time I read it. I just didn't have words that were appropriate to express the depth of response it evokes.

Still don't.

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29 posted 2003-02-24 01:21 AM

Martie - you write so many that belong in the book my friend, I like them all. My vote...

BC

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30 posted 2003-02-24 03:14 PM

Martie, I reflect in some of the same ways
of my mother who died so tragically young.
Often wondering how she would be now, how
would she look....and so much more...

Hugs to ya...

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31 posted 2003-02-24 03:23 PM

Martie: I hope someday, someone writes about me this way! I am voting for this wonderful poem!

Betty Lou Hebert

[This message has been edited by Trillium (02-24-2003 03:23 PM).]

Lighthousebob
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32 posted 2003-02-24 05:38 PM

What I like best about your poem is your insight into regrowth. I love how you see from the charred woods new life appearing and how you can relate that image, you paint so vividly in our minds, with the lifting up of your sorrow of missing your loved one. Your poem is full of strong imagery and again gives a very insightful message regarding how time and love have a way of bringing new growth to a deluded wood and healing to a sorrowful heart. Very well written and for me your poem is a poem that is full of healing and promise.

-Bob

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33 posted 2003-02-24 05:48 PM

nice story

~Every girl has a dream within.

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34 posted 2003-02-26 05:07 PM

Most beautiful Martie.

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35 posted 2003-02-26 07:59 PM

There are just no words. I can only say, it's wonderful.

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36 posted 2003-03-02 03:16 AM

Martie, you already know I love this and want to see it included in the book.

and hugs, dear one

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37 posted 2003-03-10 10:23 AM

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38 posted 2003-03-10 12:09 PM

Martie,
Thought I voted for this? well you have it now.

lucky
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39 posted 2003-05-08 01:43 AM

how many thumbs you need..? Got two if that will help.

dale gwaltney says YES..!

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40 posted 2003-05-08 10:55 PM

A beautiful, heartfelt tribute to your friend. You write with such polished poise and feeling. I enjoyed this read very much.

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41 posted 2003-05-10 12:04 PM

Dear Lady M,
I believe you incapable of writing anything but wonderous beauty no matter the subject. Peace be to you and yours, and with vote in hand I say, "Brava."

P.S. Hmmmm, seems they have already given you the go ahead for book consideration. All the same, a vote in spirit.

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