Open Poetry #24 |
Reawakening |
jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
(I peeked at the Poetry Workshop and they were doing iambic pentameter. I'm trying to write one here, hoping it's done right. Somebody, please tell me??) I pray each night as I lay down to sleep that I find peace in dreams devoid of strife, My soul may travel far in worlds unknown, or find a path that leads to darkened woods. If in the morn I wake up fresh as dew, for this new day that I am still alive, for this new year unfolding like a bud, I thank our God this miracle He grants. I wish for all a Happy New Year, too! May kindness, peace and love be yours to have. [This message has been edited by jjote (01-02-2003 06:47 AM).] |
||
© Copyright 2003 Josefina Costales - All Rights Reserved | |||
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
December was Blank Verse month - That's unrhymed iambic pentameter. This lovely piece fits the bill perfectly. You meter is flawless... Happy New Year to you as well... |
||
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
My soul may travel far in worlds unknown, hi jjote, that sounds like a wonderful new year resolution to have...i'll bring this line along with me through the year of 2003... |
||
jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
Thanks Nan & Kaile. You'll inspire me to write more..(oh no, not again!-someone may groan..) |
||
Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
well done!! Happy New Year! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
||
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
not sure what it is you were trying to do with iambic pentameter? or whatever it is...but it sure is a good write |
||
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well, i'm not groaning |
||
garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Josefina, I'm like Dixie (passing shadows), I have no idea what kind of poem you were attempting to write. All I know is that I like it. I like the thoughts and the way you wrote each line with ten syllables. I've thought of going to the "Poetry Workshop", but have hesitated because I don't think I know enough about poetry To even go there. Thank you for sharing with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
||
⇧ top of page ⇧ | ||
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. |