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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas 
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Caught in a time of heat and lies I simply couldn’t absorb. Your hateful hands that marked My neck were bold and scarred. This veil that I wore.. Invisible covered many wounds, many hopes countless abrasions of the soul. My poison was you Dripping like the wax from A lit candle. seeping inside me one word at a time. building in empty spaces Until you filled me like the sun of Nevada desert. Thirsty and dehydrated. Your voice scares me even today [This message has been edited by Salty (12-28-2002 03:13 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOw. Best to rid yourself of that poison for good. Drink lost of clean refreshing REAL Love. (BTW, you can use edit function to fix the title) |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
I am rid of him except those phone calls that have to do with our daughter. I had a conversation today that really upset me. His voice just sends unpleasant vibes all through me. I think I'll take your advice *S* Thanks for reading me, and letting me know about the title. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Salty~ This is a very emotional and powerful write. I felt your words as I read. Very nicely done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Salty  I'm sorry that he makes you feel this way, but it's good that you're getting it out. My deceased husband was verbally abusive (at times) and the actual tone of his voice made me tremble sometimes. Thanks for sharing your heart.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
My poison was you Dripping like the wax from A lit candle. seeping inside me one word at a time. building in empty spaces Poignant writing Salty and feelings that I can much identify with. Yes, sometimes it seems they have poisoned us with their words.....and the venom seems to last way to long. Very well done friend. I enjoyed.  |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
vlraynes I just hung up the phone...and wrote this. Trying to rid the negativity of him. Thank you for reading Vicki Ethel I don't have to deal with him that much any more, but when I do you people may have to hear about it. lol. Thank you for your kind words and response. In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Gentle Spirit Words sharper than blades...and yes they can sting for a life time. We shouldn't allow ourselves to entertain these thoughts for too long. I'll just write them and rid them with a little help from my friends. *S* Thank you so much for reading me. In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. --Deepak Chop [This message has been edited by Salty (12-28-2002 04:41 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
girlfriend, I know...I had one and don't ever want to hear his voice again. |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
passing shadows It's those trigger points....God! I hate them. IT's nice knowing someone understands that fear...Thank you for responding. ~Salty |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
This fear and abuse comes in many different forms, I too have have succumbed to the poison of another's words.. great write |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Salty, You did many a favor by writing of this awful relationship. Some actually couldn't believe such happens. Others, not nearly as talented as you in writing, can totally relate and it will seem you wrote it for them, too. And, I have a feeling you did. Very well written. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
powerful, and pAiNful words.. You wrote this really well though.. and keep writing to ease the mere thought of him. You're strong. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Salty, ouch! This was obviously a very painful relationship. I hope you spit the poison out and can someday let go of those fears. We are here if you need us. Hugs, Marti |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I know this may be difficult...because it is for me as well....but what is important is.. how you think of you....not how he does... for obviously he has his head in the sand and certainly doesn't care about your own feelings... Therefore I say, strike 3, you can't control me..... any more... |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Marti I can feel peoples compasion in here. It is the perfect place to let go of fears. Thank You!!! -------------------------------- Magnus I like that....I think I'll try to remember it the next time he gets to me. I'll Just simply say strike three...and let him wonder what in the hell I"m talking about. *S* That's a good focus...Thank You! In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. --Deepak Chop [This message has been edited by Salty (12-29-2002 02:05 AM).] |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Well this is all very strange. I had wrote each of your responses in one reply, and only half of it posted. So here comes the rest of it..hopefully. ------------------------------------------- Aenimal Abuse come in many forms from many types of people. I am thinking you speak of your dad...but, whoever it is... They have No right!! It's scarey how much power words can have on a person isn't it? I'll stand in your corner if you stand in mine *S*. Thank you so much for reading. --------------------- regards2you Yes I write for anyone that has ever experienced this.... and I think they will understand my words all to well. Still it's nice to know others have been there and survived. Thank you for stopping in. ----------------------------------- Thank You ever so much sweet GG!!!! ------------------------- [This message has been edited by Salty (12-29-2002 02:03 AM).] |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
there is a voice of past I still find frightening and hope never to hear again..you've written the emotions perfectly--well done! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Sandpiper Frightening isn't it? Even his answering machine makes my skin crawl. It's good to be able to write about it....maybe you should try it. Thank you for understanding and replying. ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are an inspiration to me Salty Girl... as strange as it seems your fear gives me strength. I admire the hard truths in your writing, and the determination that becomes you and your poetry. love and hugs~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Hope writing is theraputic for you. Is for me. Bon chance. |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
BluesSerenade I believe that is one the finest compliments I have ever had. Thank you !! ------------- RSWELLS Yes it is for me also....Thank you for reading . |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well written...James |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
awe....Thank You JamesMichael...you snuck in while I wasn't looking. *S* ~Salty |
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