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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

0 posted 2002-12-27 12:33 PM

My Words (12/3/02, JDC)

Is it just a self-fulfilling prophecy?
My vision is so unclear
Or is it an overwhelming fear
I ran out of words today
So sick of writing about my despair
Broken hearted, beyond repair
So repulsed by myself
What more is there to say?
I make myself feel this way
I open my mouth and ugly comes out
Everyone would stay away from me
If they could see the horror that I can be
But, alas I ran out of words today
No soothing phrases of comfort spew from my pen
It’s beyond a matter of when
This time I have killed myself
I gave up way too soon
Penciling in my own doom

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

1 posted 2002-12-27 02:31 PM

Susan,

~Welcome to Passions~!

You are in the right place; you just keep penciling your doom (though haven't seen any other poems of yours)
you'll find a wonderful support group here to chase the gloom away and
appreciate your ability of speaking your mind poetically, as you've done with this poem. I heard your heart and soul loud and clear. Well-written.

Hugs and warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

2 posted 2002-12-27 02:34 PM

Welcome! I like this poem. You have a talent.

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     ×`·.¸.·´×
    Love Always
       Kellie

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2002-12-27 02:56 PM

Thank you both!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2002-12-27 03:12 PM

Wow great work! Welcome to PIP. Some edge and grit I love it......

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-12-27 03:20 PM

This is your second poem I've read and I like it very, too.
As Pat said, this is a wonderful place to write about whatever feelings you are having. there are always friends here with open arms and hears to encourage.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2002-12-27 03:24 PM

I love all you guys already! This poem isn't as dark as it seems (I am a drama queen with my words). It is about a fight I had with the guy I am seeing.

Thank you all so much for the input!

Susan

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