Open Poetry #24 |
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Passing time |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
For all of us facing time, I've put together this little ryme, So I hope you like this ryme of mine, This poem is about passing time, We stand with our backs to the wind, Looking at out very end, We take step Or do we walk away, Do we have the courage To look and turn away, Do we barge foward not caring of what lies ahead, Or do we stand our ground with the unmistakeable look of dread, Many of us watch the clocks, Wondering when our hand it going to stop, Some press on some run in fear, But no matter what you do the eand is very near For all of us passing time, I really hoped you will injoy this ryme, Now until we meet in the end, I remain always humbly your friend |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
nice message. basic rhymes, but it could always be worse. what's with the capitals in the middle of the lines? it's distracting, but .. i liked it. like i said, gave out a good message. keep it up. -chris. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Happy New Year! The annual ritual of watching the clock is upon us. Enjoyed this timely piece. ![]() |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I liked the "rhyme of the time". ![]() "Love makes the world go around" |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
well thanks for all that liked it I guess I just want it to look snapy so I tried to put it captol |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I enjoyed this rhyme |
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