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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-12-24 04:15 AM

pull
the string
and stretch the bow
taut on taut
releasing tears
and let the whine
gypsy the stars...
I reach
for non-existant shawl
swaying to the fire
of ancient
memory
of cell
one foot padding
dust in sway...

ssssssh...
a timble
of the tambourine
I play behind my back
distracting eyes
that stare to flame
sing the round
(sing the round)
echo home's infinity

let the flute
sigh my despair
pour me
one more
mug of mead...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-12-24 11:34 AM

"releasing tears
and let the whine
gypsy the stars..."

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"let the flute
sigh my despair
pour me
one more
mug of mead..."

these were my favorite parts, but I love the feel of this piece....you do this so well...

Merry Christmas

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

2 posted 2002-12-24 01:14 PM

taut
ancient
memory

sing
infinity

mmmhmmm

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2002-12-24 03:00 PM

pull
the string
and stretch the bow
taut on taut
releasing tears

I love how you write and make anything however dark or painful,seem beautiful in the words you choose

raf

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-12-24 03:04 PM

"ssssssh...
a timble
of the tambourine
I play behind my back
distracting eyes
that stare to flame
sing the round
(sing the round)
echo home's infinity"

Great stuff here ser.
Did I tell ya I have a tambourine also?
Yup...and guess what else?

Kit found it!

Love the way you write gal!
~Hugs and merry merry~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 2002-12-24 03:36 PM

Too amny fine lines in this piece to have to narrow down my favorite. Insightful and expressive.
Merry Christmas

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-12-24 04:31 PM

and in this
I am encased
in deep...

feel the weep
oh feel the weep...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2002-12-24 04:35 PM

Serenity,
You play a mean symbol. LOL Happy Holiday.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

8 posted 2002-12-24 06:21 PM

serenity - I can just see you dancing by the light of a fire...twirling skirts, fringed shawl flying....yup can to see it!! Love this and it's going into my library. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

9 posted 2003-01-12 12:10 PM

Enjoyed this very very much...
Hugs2uDearPoetFriend...
*~coco~*

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2003-01-12 02:19 AM

that's not fair! All the mods get the neat animations! let me have some too!

good write Karen, if I had some neat animations I'd put some out here for you!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2003-01-12 11:01 AM

Ser.  I can see you in two scenarios...
One where you have your black cape,  pointed
hat and broom....chanting to the cauldron
bubbling with some spicy brew of manliness.

and secondly...the gypsy woman....twirling,
swirling,  with her tambourine...  Oh yes..
definitely...

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2003-01-12 11:07 AM

Oh my...I am grinning here.

Coco, oh coco...you caught me again.

(sometimes I write poems I forget about and yep, this is one of 'em--and then Coco pops in and kicks me to the top, and I jump at the sight of my own name. Sort of like startling yourself in a mirror...grin)

Thank you kind folks...shaking my head here.

sheesh. I'm a nut.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

13 posted 2003-01-12 11:09 AM

You just may be my Nawlins gypsy twin, the one who learned to dance before the fire's bright lights while I hid within the cool night shadows.
Just where did I leave my tambourine?

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

14 posted 2003-01-27 01:24 PM

Desolation in wait of comfort, and vice versa.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

15 posted 2003-01-27 08:29 PM

serenity blaze - one more mug ye shall have..

BC

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

16 posted 2003-01-27 09:29 PM

The knight smiles and she catchs his gold coin in her tamborine.Tis small payment for such beauty.

paladin

....a knight without armor

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

17 posted 2003-01-27 09:40 PM

I like the flow of this piece. I too like the ending stanza best.

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

18 posted 2003-01-28 03:56 PM

I reach
for non-existant shawl
swaying to the fire
of ancient
memory
of cell
one foot padding
dust in sway...

Hynoptic words.

got hips like cinderella must be having a good shame talking sweet about nothing
cookie i think you're tame" The Pixies

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