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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
emoceans -------- you executed the revolution so poetically, left me there--on the sofa seat, chasing supernovas with a remote control .. and i know--i told you to have a good time .. i know--i smiled, and i meant it i meant it .. but, since you left i've been stranded on carpets channel-surfing on emoceans, and there's been nothing good to watch on TV .. just been busy playing scrabble with this cold alphabet soup inside a living room; that's warmed by the trace of your perfume. it's been so quiet .. it's been so boring, here .. so, i'll place my faith in some latenite talkshow, pull the drapes to catch an empty parking space, just to let myself know it's another pseudo-night .. it's beautiful--beautiful tonight, and i'm just too insignificant. so come home, and we can defy tragic endings .. over boardgames and cold pizza tell me how much fun you had, i'll tell you how much fun i had .. tell me everything tell me you had the time of your life i'll smile, and i'll mean it .. i'll mean it .. because you're here, and it's beautiful--beautiful tonight. ------------------------------------------- "and i dont want the world to see me because i don't think that theyd understand, when everythings meant to be broken i just want you to know" [goo goo dolls] ------------------------------------------- [This message has been edited by christian (12-24-2002 09:52 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I did speed read this a bit...but I loved it and it flowed... my only honest policy critique? gawd I would love to see you change the title to "emoceans" that IS the centerpiece for me... left lovely see-shells on my shore.  |
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neveah5 Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 197Ohio |
wow i liked this a lot...made me quite sad...but really liked it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"we can defy tragic endings..." many great lines here. Liked this one alot. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 It must be Christmas! thanks lovie! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and by the way...loved this quote from the "goo-goo dolls": "and i dont want the world to see me because i don't think that they'd understand, when everything's meant to be broken i just want you to know" it added to the intent of the poem, but you might wanna be more careful with credit in the future...grin..dem dat don't know? might not understand... "who I am..." *smile* |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
You mean this did not have "emoceans" to begin with... it had another title? I'm so pleased you made Serenity's Christmas... because you made it for the rest of us, too! Super title...great read! |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
An excellent read with some truly amazing phrases and images--enjoyed, a lot! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
christian Enjoyed the read, Merry Christmas. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Chris, Very good. Enjoyed. Everything Sandpiper said, plus I like the sentiment in this. Touching. Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
This is the greatest title I've read in a long while. Great poem too! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Christian, this is a good poem, written with lots of feelings and emotions, or should I say "emoceans". That is a great title, by the way. but, I didn't see what it was before. I might have liked that one, too.Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours, Chris. And, also, welcome to Passions In Poetry.   "Love makes the world go around" |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I sincerely enjoy the way you write. Raw, honest, not quite rambling. (That's a good thing...lol) And yeah, the title is perfect. |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
serenity, well .. technically speaking, i did put in it 'quotes', but yeah .. i think i'll change it for the sake of people saying it's a form of plagiarism. thanks for the fedback by the way. -- thanks y'all, merry christmas to everyone. -chris. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is a great title... and the poem?....Packed with "emoceans" and real imagery. Just the way I like it  Enjoyed Chris. Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (12-26-2002 03:56 AM).] |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Enjoying your poetic talent. sunkissed. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Christian~ I like this very much. You've got some excellent lines in this piece, and it's a very enjoyable read. Happy Holidays to you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-27-2002 02:33 AM).] |
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