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Iambe Sleeps
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Her head hurt. Kristie Sue’s car was sitting out on the apron That led into the shop, just where Joe had dropped it And she knew she needed to get off the steps, Make some coffee, then go take a look at it. But she sat there instead, Watching the sun continue its climb Over Beckerman’s ridge With the empty bottle of Scary Smooth Still cradled between her knees. George pulled up in his old Dodge And the scattered gravel crunching Reminded her of another old truck Pulling in and of the man who always got out of it With as much caution as a coyote Who has been trapped once And now only has three legs Having chewed the other off Just to escape. It was not him It was George So she stretched herself up off the stairs Just as George was about to reach the bottom one. “Iambe, you alright?” George said. “Good thing I caught you.” “You stood up, and stretched like a lazy old barn cat, then just did a header off the step.” He continued. She opened her eyes And saw she was in her bed And George was shifting foot to foot Down at the foot of it Still talking, though she wasn’t hearing the words. “Hey George.” She weakly replied and waved a hand his way. “Must have been that last slug of Scary Smooth did me in.” “I’ll be OK, soon as I sleep a bit.” She slurred. George looked at her as she closed her eyes Noticing the lines of her face seemed to smooth And couldn’t remember ever seeing her look that soft. He backed out of the bedroom and walked to the kitchen. Paper and a few quick lines to Iambe about how the old truck Needed new brakes, and he was out the door, Locking it when he left. Iambe stirred And reached with a half stretched arm For the other side of the bed But finding nothing there Turned her back to the hollow he used to lie in And pulled her knees up to her chest And slept. …………………………………………………. Somewhere in the sky I named a star for you And I am left here gazing wondering if you knew Sometimes in the morning the sun forgets its rise And I go slightly crazy from the tears found in my eyes Still the world keeps turning and on we all do ride Tell me can you tell me where does true love hide. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I feel Lambe... Susan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Somewhere in the sky I named a star for you And I am left here gazing wondering if you knew Sometimes in the morning the sun forgets its rise And I go slightly crazy from the tears found in my eyes Still the world keeps turning and on we all do ride Tell me can you tell me where does true love hide. ================================ The moth is giddy...and sighing  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan, thank you ma'am..I truly don't know of anything more pleasing than to have someone say they feel a character you have written.. JM... just a little rhyme of the top of my head...had to try and make this yarn in some way poetic... even if it was rhyme to do it..  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
AAAWWW, Capt. Ron, this one is so sweet..... Just in time for Valentine's Day....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
glad you liked ethel... thanks for dropping in. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*shaking me mothy head* "just a little rhyme" he says.... Capt, Capt...whats it gonna take to open those eyes of yours.... read those rhymes divine them aloud so that thy blind eyes might see... "just a little rhyme" he says.... more like a song needing to be sung.... So....when can I expect the rest of the tune Me and Sen will be your back up girls.. Martie and Sun got the tamborines... Dunc will play drums.... Now finish that lil diddy ...the moth loves being giddy lmao.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well.. JM.. how many verses you want... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Figures...I have to be Ringo! Be back to comment Ron, after the moth dust settles.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well now Capt...thats a dangerous question to ask a greedy moth that craves rhyme LOL Your first release could turn out to be a double cd But...I'll be a good moth.. What ever rhymes come to mind will be fine lol give us some more verses and a chorus to go with that BEAUTY up above.. write me a moth anthem baby Somewhere in the sky I named a star for you And I am left here gazing wondering if you knew Sing the blues boyeeee..sing those blues... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, pull my guts out and pour salt into the wound... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OHMYGOSH!!! I was all wound up in the story with lambe and .... I get to the end and this rhyme takes my breath clear away!! Do you know how beautiful that is?? But, of course you do... Please add to it...listen to JM then okay? Just this once?? Pleeeease! Yer so good! ~Hugs, Smiles, & Sighs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Have to agree, I really like that last verse. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
that's awesome Cpat. I can't wait until I have the time to go back and read from the beginning... Ringo...funny you mention him. That's the nickname of the guy I'm head over for LOL I guess I'm kind of idiotic....it's not like it's going to happen. Two different worlds I guess, and my is a dreamland.... So ANYWAY.... Keep up the awesome work Cpat! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ron, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this made me smile as I love to see such a upbeat afterglow fill in these spaces due Valentines Day! (big hugggsssssss) Now I wonder what happens when he rises in the morning, this is fabulous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I didn't want this to end. I was entranced into the story I could see it and feel it, you described it so well. Loved it.. yes.. loved it!! thank you!! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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