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Landings
New Member

since 2003-02-11

Posts 7

0 posted 2003-02-12 03:30 PM

The clasp which conjoins earth and sky
A distant point one can always see
But never conquer

Much like this is my love for her
She, the much sought after portion
Of my uncompleted heart
A gem, a jewel upon which
My faded eyes are fixed and brightened
Her voice, a melodious song
Whose clef knows no boundaries
In its command o'er me
Her fragrant aroma
Saturating the air around her
More needed now than oxygen

But to disclose this unseen pining
Though veiled only by thin silk
Is far too great a task
To risk a weakened heart's demise
And to bear the brand of despairing love
Which no remedy may avail

So for now, my hands, so close
Shall further not their distance
Yet I shall cherish from afar
This rose, for whose petals I yearn
This dove, with whose wings I may take flight
The unknowing recipient of my affections
Whose soft lips I long to taste

Let me know what you think.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2003-02-12 03:39 PM

Her fragrant aroma
Saturating the air around her
More needed now than oxygen

But to disclose this unseen pining
Though veiled only by thin silk
Is far too great a task
To risk a weakened heart's demise
And to bear the brand of despairing love
Which no remedy may avail

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I think this is a beautiful poetic testament of heart..love the traces of longing laced in the with images and personification.

Welcome to Poetry Land ...
so nice to have you here with us.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

2 posted 2003-02-12 03:43 PM

"Her fragrant aroma
Saturating the air around her
More needed now than oxygen"

I loved these lines.

Great write and welcome.

Susan C.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-02-12 03:43 PM

Much enjoyed your first post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

4 posted 2003-02-12 03:55 PM

Landings - very nice write, many thoughts here...

BC

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-02-12 04:14 PM

I think...you've just been heartily Welcomed to Passions!

Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

Landings
New Member

since 2003-02-11

Posts 7

6 posted 2003-02-12 04:51 PM

Thank you all so much... Special thanks to Sunshine!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2003-02-12 04:51 PM

hello...

"So for now, my hands, so close
Shall further not their distance
Yet I shall cherish from afar"

*sigh*
this is incredibly romantic
welcome

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-02-12 08:20 PM

(smiles) This is such a gorgeous debut, sweet friend, may your dove come and croon the proclamation of love to your heart, yay, this is beautiful, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!