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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-02-07 12:22 PM

This is not my reflection
so now lined in age
with circled eyes
"Fool", she said,
"You are eroded clay."

"Then I can be molded,fired in kiln and given glaze." I replied.

She laughed
and with the sneer of lip spat at me.
"You are not even fine clay, you hold the rot
of root and leaf."

"Then I might be enriched and grow seeds planted in me." I hoped.

Her amusement grew...
"You can not breathe and all placed in your depths will be sterile."

"Look again in the mirror and at your life."
"Do you see any beauty left in you?"

"no' I replied softly
"you leach that from me each time we speak."

I felt her sigh
" Maybe next time, you'll get it right."

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-02-07 12:27 PM

sounds like conversations i used to have with my parents

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-02-07 12:32 PM

Ow....
whack!

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2003-02-07 12:32 PM

Though not meant to be this is
a~muse~ing...for all it's worth.

Wow! Very well written and sarcasm at it's best...("You leach that from me each time we speak") AND, heart-breaking as well....what one can do to another. Sad! Very, very painful

Lots of touching, thinking, feeling here..and hope this is not a real experience. Can't remember title exactly but it referenced muse??sick??
Do you mean quite a song????

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (02-07-2003 12:39 PM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2003-02-07 12:39 PM

I personally think the earthy compost heap holds the most promise.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2003-02-07 12:40 PM

This made my stomach hurt, like having the wind knocked out of you...slowly.
Different, I like it.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2003-02-07 12:56 PM

Oh WOW! Geesh! Smack!
Love this change of pace for you.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Jaime

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Posts 250

7 posted 2003-02-07 12:57 PM

This had a strange quality to it that made it appealing. Perhaps because reading over it, the reader is wondering which one they would be (although people are often inclined to believe they are a victim). If perhaps the one led to the other. There's an earthly reality to this like the root and the leaf. Now where did they come from? And how did they get there?

Hmm... don't ask me. I don't know why she thinks the way she does.

Much enjoyed.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

[This message has been edited by Jaime (02-07-2003 12:58 PM).]

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2003-02-07 12:58 PM

thanks for you kind words..all of you.

There are days I would not hear her voice in my head...days I would have her silenced forever. (chuckling) It must be borderline madness to hear the words whispered to you always...every time you pause there be a gibe from them telling you how little you can say..how foolish you are for writing things down or seeing the images..and trying to write them... so yes..even in the shower my muse stalks me...and it not a haunt as much as a stalking..always there when you turn around..spinning lines from technical conversations having no poetic value or inspiration other than this...inner ear searching for the perfect timbre..the pure tonal understanding of it...

See... it is madness...

anyone want a highly demanding muse? Take mine...
I could use the vacation.. ( chuckling)

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-07-2003 01:01 PM).]

BlueEyes
Member

since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

9 posted 2003-02-07 01:06 PM

O Cpat! Where you there listening at my window last night?!?!?

BlueEyes

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2003-02-07 02:07 PM

like the sculptor who turns clay into treasured keepsakes...you the poet turns those voices into poetic gold...

try as she might...thy pen is mighter than thy muse.

and if she'll let me write with the soul of Iambe...I'll take her off your hands for a bit...but you and I both know...youd miss her after awhile

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

11 posted 2003-02-07 02:48 PM

Captain, a "fool" you are not.
Seeds of love can mend a broken heart and body.

Sending you Valentine seeds to make your garden bloom and flourish once again!

EA

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2003-02-07 03:00 PM

smile.

Yours is the only muse I ever heard of that wears leather and carries a whip...

I know a couple of men who would actually be jealous.

and as for "getting it right?" You just did.

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

13 posted 2003-02-07 03:10 PM

Shhh! Did you hear it? I just broke a symbolic jar of clay in your honor. Maybe you should do the same, being careful, of course, where you aim.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

14 posted 2003-02-07 03:31 PM

I don't know whether to call mine a muse or a stalking muse..but I am never at a loss for words, in thinking or in writing.

and I am thankful for that, as they keep me company

M

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2003-02-07 04:17 PM

as always, very strong write

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

16 posted 2003-02-07 05:01 PM

Why, just the other day I had some gorgeous lady tell me to scoot over closer,,,,(but she also said I was sitting on her fern)

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

17 posted 2003-02-07 05:06 PM

Ron...send her over here so I can give her a talking to about what is beauiful...because you, my friend, are!

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

18 posted 2003-02-07 05:28 PM

I think your muse is teasing you sir. She is doing this to make you write of her more often..she's very vain!!

See how many poems lately have been directed at her? Don't you think SHE plans it this way????

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

19 posted 2003-02-07 07:45 PM

Wow, I'm awestruck......
very enjoyed!

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

20 posted 2003-02-07 08:11 PM

That's no muse...that's my ex-wife!!!

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

21 posted 2003-02-10 02:28 PM

missed this one....always working too hard...sigh...
seems she is the one who should look in the mirror...it is but her own reflection that she sees on you...
wonderful write

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

22 posted 2003-02-10 03:29 PM

Mine jumps into the shower
and turns on the cold water!!!

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