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Ericc
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0 posted 2003-02-05 11:48 PM



   You lean in to me
   close
   and whisper something
   in my ear -

   The words themselves are unimportant.

   It's the breath...like the building breeze
   just before a summer storm.
   First the stillness.
   Nothing
   Moves.
   Then the slow climb of heated fury...exploding
   to the storms sudden passion.
   And then...once more...the stillness.

   It's the breath.

   And what it carries.

© Copyright 2003 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-05 11:49 PM


Beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2003-02-05 11:53 PM




(smiles) Oh Eric, this is beautiful, sweet friend, its within the breath and the lungs that music comes out and doesn't it always seem to go through melody that such love? (big hugggsssssssss) This is precious, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

GG
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3 posted 2003-02-05 11:58 PM


sweet and stunning and in depth... I now want to whisper to more friends and I'd never quite thought of it like this. Makes the act so much more graceful, beautiful.

And BTW, congrats on your hundredth post, sir

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

carol
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4 posted 2003-02-05 11:58 PM


ericc, i really love this one
passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-02-06 03:06 AM


wow! awesome writing! left me breathless
Enchantress
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6 posted 2003-02-06 09:14 AM


..Yes, it is...
and, you are amazing.
~Morning hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

1slick_lady
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7 posted 2003-02-06 09:49 AM


i'm telling you you are fast becoming one of my fav poets...helen

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (02-06-2003 10:04 AM).]

Sunshine
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8 posted 2003-02-06 09:53 AM



Whew....

abbe
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9 posted 2003-02-06 12:12 PM


sweet memory, the soft breath of someone at my ear

you're right, it is not the words, it is the simple intimacy in the moment... sweet

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10 posted 2003-02-06 12:17 PM


Eric, this is beautiful...
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11 posted 2003-02-06 06:56 PM


A sigh of love for such a beautiful whisper... words can never be as important, for they are inferior to the expression of a single sweet breath... aaaaahhhh, such love and beauty.

Thank you...

Love,
Moca

JamesMichael
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12 posted 2003-02-07 12:28 PM


Enjoyed...James
vlraynes
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13 posted 2003-02-08 12:38 PM



This is lovely, Eric.
Very much enjoyed.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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