Open Poetry #24 |
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Mirror, Mirror |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA ![]() |
This board, the ball, the darkened room. Smell of sweat, cigars, cheap perfume. Too much make-up and wrinkled gown with a veil of lace covering her frown. Mirror, mirror, these words once heard. visions of witch, girl and blackbird. Ouija, circle, held hands, blank stares around the room, rickety chairs. A man of shadow, darkened eyes the guest of honor with one surprise. His quest to find his lady fair of flowing white gown, brunette hair Her eyes of blue from out a dream beneath a fall, a crystal stream. Where love was made but once that day and then she left, vanished away. The Madam called, the board did move. The young man sat, he would approve. A ball of glass did show her face, this belle of his, behind the lace. Mirror, mirror from long ago where is the fairest belle I know? Tell this board, this wicked dame whisper softly, I need her name. A mist did fall upon the room a cold dark spell of deepest gloom. The woman moaned, the spell broken until the ball did light in reckon. Lenore the name, this most fair child. A woman’s shape to drive men wild. His heart in race of passion’s best beat wild in chase against his chest. He reached to feel, to touch the skin of her, his prize, his want to win. Upon the break the human chain Lenore was gone, love lost again. The Madam smiled an inward glow that to his eyes it would not show. Her prize his heart, for her to keep and for all time, Lenore would sleep. [This message has been edited by Magnus (12-19-2002 10:29 PM).] |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
ooooh I like this eerie little tale....wickedly charming. ~Salty |
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Laney Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 85Illinois |
You have very strong talent..I love how this poem draws you in and creates a very dark atmosphere! Nice write! --Alana |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Barry, Really liked this a lot. Especially enjoyed the ending. Warm regards, Pat ![]() ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Impressive Sir Knight! Impressive. TD |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
excellent magnus |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Dear Magnus - captivating write. I enjoyed this, although I probably will have frightening dreams to-night. lol. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oooo, spooky...what a story teller you are...enjoyed this Barry. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) Yay!!! Wow, this is soooooo beautifully haunting, sweet friend, and may this prize forever be cherished dear with love and not lust as black as the ravens complexion! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
feel like I should be standing in a circle of fire...hehe...this chills to warm, enjoyed!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
ahhh hail to Spooky Mahn! ![]() Excellent and amazing..You do this so well! Hugs, Cher Poetry is: |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Barry~ VERY cool write, my friend. Your talent shines through in this haunting piece. I enjoyed this very much. ![]() Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry You pulled atmesphere out of the bag with this like Beatlejuice, but much better. Really enjoyed! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a fascinating tale you've woven ![]() |
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