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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2003-02-05 07:29 AM


Chaff and Prim

Those would find the Eden glen.
Must take account of where they’ve been.
Must recognize the path of whim.
And peel away the chaff and prim.

Must lighten all their weight of must.
Must fill their minds with only trust.
Stand upon a mountain high.
And face their face into the sky.

It is a gardens fantasy.
Upon a road of agony
It is a garden of the blind.
Or should I say a state of mind.

Do you believe the blind can see?
Than I would say you have the key.
Insert it in the rhyme of lock
And face your time that shows the clock.

There is a prima factor goal
Forgiveness is its heart and soul.


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Professor Gloom
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1 posted 2003-02-05 07:35 AM


Eden is locked behind a gate
Which most have forgot of late
Opened with faith and trust
But the hinges squeak with rust

Gloom

SmartChick
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2 posted 2003-02-05 07:35 AM


Seymour, I always enjoy reading your poems. You are one of the best.
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3 posted 2003-02-05 07:51 AM


'It is a gardens fantasy.
Upon a road of agony
It is a garden of the blind.
Or should I say a state of mind.'

I love the image of this verse Sy.  'A garden of the blind'.  Perfect.

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2003-02-05 08:05 AM


Professor,
Sometimes I find the answers better then the poems. Thank you.

SmartChick
Thank you sweet,

Duncan
I like your comment, thank you.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2003-02-05 08:09 AM


Do you believe the blind can see?
Than I would say you have the key.
Insert it in the rhyme of lock
And face your time that shows the clock.

There is a prima factor goal
Forgiveness is its heart and soul.
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Your soul poetry should be published in braille so that the blind could touch the vision of your wisdom rhymes. I touch me screen and trace your rhyme scheme dreams



Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2003-02-05 08:16 AM


JM,
What can I say, you are my blind spot?
WWRS

Sunshine
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7 posted 2003-02-05 08:58 AM



Would those who opened Eden's soul
learn from travesties' own black coal?
Would there they sketch the dream of men?
and once again green Eden's glen?

You're kicking muses today, Sy...
but that's your magic!

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8 posted 2003-02-05 09:01 AM




(sigh) Oh Seymour, I believe the blind can see, perhaps more better than those who can see but have sinned so much further! (big hugggsssssss) This is powerfully insightful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2003-02-05 09:25 AM


Oooh Sy!  Wonderful read you left for moi this morning.
Oh!  it wasn't just for me?  But of course I knew that.
Love this...into my Sy folder it goes.
Now...tea?
~Morning hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2003-02-05 09:56 AM


Sunshine
And you are my magic sunshine,

Noah,
Always enjoy your replies.

Nancy,
Tea for two and me for you, thank you dear.

regards2you
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11 posted 2003-02-05 10:24 AM




Sy,

Enjoyed. The last line speaks volumes.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2003-02-05 10:46 AM


Pat,
Thank you sweet,

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