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Open Poetry #24

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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2003-02-04 03:03 PM

fingers tapping--
jungle drums
silence
beating through the palms...
I smoke.
I pace.
I smoke.
I pace.
Glaring
through the eyes
of cage--
wilderness on padded stealth
fingers tapping jungle drums
pounding rhythm
maddening
muscles
~ripple~
in restraint--
(I'll wait for opportunity...)
I nod to self, as I exhale.

I'll bite the hand
that brings me meat.
So starved am I--in need of "kill."

fingers
tap-tap
(slow war drum)
I watch the sun to measure time.
I smoke.
I pace.
I smoke.
I wait.
I hear the steps of my turnkey...

He brings me buckets
full of blood--
I smell the meat.
I drool.

I hear
the crowd
in terror--
jump

as I attacked

then...ate...alone.

I fed. I shrugged.

I groomed myself.

I yawned
and dozed contentedly.

"tomorrow is another day..."

Then
they closed the zoo.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-02-04 04:03 PM

More than a meow heard in this one.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-02-04 04:15 PM

prrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

3 posted 2003-02-04 11:54 PM

I remember this one......grin
damn you got the riddum
pass the bars
touch each one
know them by their name
tell the steel
in muscled tone
you are done with rigid game

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

4 posted 2003-02-05 12:05 PM

yikes girl,
you've got a type of rhythm here and lines that kept my eyes fastened to the screen.
An Astounding write.
Love it

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2003-02-06 01:47 AM

Hi Karen.
Just had to say 'wow'.
I heard and felt this one as I read.
Once again, you amaze me.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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