Poem: Thoughts From An Absent Lover.

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pjtalty
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0 posted 2003-02-03 02:06 PM

I speak to you
as morning’s gold filament
fades in leaves
and strong brown limbs of trees
shake hands
with early breezes.

The sights and sounds
clothe your spirit
against tomorrow's promises
weaving illusions,
which may bare
a thousand sharp needs.

Yet solitude will be fleeting:
for as surely as trees
give summer shade, moments
purple as love songs
white as whispered vows
will return when I am with you
again on that tomorrow,
as the golden fingers of morning
banish illusions, dress our dreams.

Patrick Talty

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1 posted 2003-02-03 02:20 PM

...weaving illusions,
which may bare
a thousand sharp needs. ...

Peter...
this is pungent
with feeling...

Charisma

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2 posted 2003-02-03 02:29 PM

Beautiful!!

Charisma

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3 posted 2003-02-03 02:30 PM

nice imagery...and nice flow. I enjoyed.

regards2you
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4 posted 2003-02-03 06:30 PM

Patrick,

It does flow smoothly and it is beautiful. Enjoyed a great deal.

Pat

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"Desiderata"

poohbear19
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5 posted 2003-02-03 06:51 PM

This is a beautiful poem thank you for sharing.

Andrea

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6 posted 2003-02-03 08:17 PM

Beautiful, need I say more?

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Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-02-03 08:22 PM

OHMYGOSH! This is exquisite!!
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

GOlDsparklESS
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8 posted 2003-02-03 11:41 PM

ooo very lovely, a very gold feeling imbues.

HopeS
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9 posted 2003-02-04 12:34 PM

beautiful images portrayed and wonderfully written
Hope
P.S I am from Western Australia too !!

garysgirl

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10 posted 2003-02-04 12:38 PM

This is a beautiful poem. I enjoyed
reading it.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Aenimal
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11 posted 2003-02-04 12:42 PM

Beautiful through and through though these are my favourite

'and strong brown limbs of trees
shake hands
with early breezes.'

carol
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12 posted 2003-02-04 12:48 PM

I loved this poem

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13 posted 2003-02-04 02:56 AM

just beautiful...very colorful!

pjtalty
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14 posted 2003-02-04 07:54 AM

Thanks to everyone for the kind comments about this poem. It took me umpteen drafts to get it into its present form and I'm still open to suggestions for improvement.
However, encouraging feedback of the kind posted here is very much appreciated.

Patrick Talty

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