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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-02-03 09:05 AM

Wind came from the south
Bringing with it a hint of desert
Tempered over prairie grass
Until it only warmed.

I wandered back roads
Jostle bounced over ruts
From wetter times now archived
In solid form and thoughts turned
As they often do
To
You

Our
Late Winter searches for
The first green blade
Or opened flower
Heralding an end
To drifting.

We dreamed easy then
Slipping into silences
That were punctuated with lips
And ended in exclamations
As commas were placed on skin
That composed pages
Of passion

But the wind shifted North,
And that chapter was lost
In a gale that rent words
Into syllables

Scattering unspoken

Lost on late winter fields
To lay fallow

as ash
from long ago

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-02-03 09:10 AM

Cpat,
A good write and a nice read, enjoyed.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-03 09:14 AM

"Slipping into silences
That were punctuated with lips
And ended in exclamations
As commas were placed on skin
That composed pages
Of passion"

Love this...especially the above lines Ron.
Well done..very well done!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

pjtalty
Member

since 2002-07-17

Posts 111
W.A., Australia

3 posted 2003-02-03 09:17 AM

An intriguing journey for the reader through a tale of unrequited love presented per medium of powerful and passionate images in appropriately formatted and beckoning rhythms of free verse. I enjoyed the journey on an intellectual level as well as that of tne emotional level demanded by this fine piece of writing.

Patrick Talty

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-02-03 09:20 AM

Seymour..thank you sir..glad you found it to your liking.

nancy... glad you liked.. thanks for the nice words...

patrick... ( chuckling) thank you... got to say.. your reply is refreshing.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2003-02-03 09:27 AM

‘I wandered back roads
Jostle bounced over ruts
From wetter times now archived
In solid form and thoughts turned
As they often do
To
You’

‘But the wind shifted North,
And that chapter was lost
In a gale that rent words
Into syllables

Scattering unspoken

Lost on late winter fields
To lay fallow

as ash
from long ago’

My Chinese New Year's resolution is to accept your repeated statement, that you are not a poet. That said...
Damn, I wish I wasn't a poet!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-02-03 09:31 AM

Duncan.. you are a poet... a damned good one.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-02-03 09:54 AM

...We dreamed easy then
Slipping into silences...

~*~

quiet interludes,
always welcome...

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2003-02-03 10:05 AM

quiet interludes indeed....

thanks Sunshine for dropping in.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

9 posted 2003-02-03 10:31 AM

Ron,

Whoa! I was going to say the same thing Patrick did.....smiling here, were I able to write so eloquently, and though I have my moments, this isn't one of them;

that is definitely is a rich reply!
The only true 'emotional' words being in the title and you carried that theme ~subtly~ to the end....enjoyed!

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2003-02-03 10:37 AM

Pat.. thank you. I'm not smart enough to say what Patrik did ( chuckling)

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2003-02-03 10:55 AM

From wetter times now archived
We dreamed easy then
Slipping into silences
That were punctuated with lips
And ended in exclamations
As commas were placed on skin
That composed pages
Of passion

But the wind shifted North,
And that chapter was lost
In a gale that rent words
Into syllables

Scattering unspoken
===============================

and you are a poets poet ...

the personification, analogy and tie ins of emotion and poetry made this bittersweet beauty a poets poem!

Must be why poetry land seek out your name in the blue

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

12 posted 2003-02-03 10:55 AM

Ron...I'm not smart enough to say what Patrik did either...but still enjoy how you bring nature's way into your personal way. Well done as always, friend!

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

13 posted 2003-02-03 02:48 PM

Great write, Ron...back roads will get you where you're going...with lots of memories to boot..

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

14 posted 2003-02-03 02:52 PM

Cpat Hair.. your poem almost describes the mood of the day for me. Are you not referring to the warm front of air from the south that we are currently experiencing? Hey man i dont miss it.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

15 posted 2003-02-03 11:02 PM

(big hugggssssssss) You've got to sow those wild oats or the real reaper could take the plowers position! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, you always have the right words to say, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

16 posted 2003-02-03 11:38 PM

i agree with pj and jm.. i feel this one.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

17 posted 2003-02-04 12:38 PM

In a gale that rent words
Into syllables

Scattering unspoken

Hate to single out words when all of them are wonderful, but I just love the masterful imagery of these

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

18 posted 2003-02-04 12:44 PM

Well, Capt. Ron, I guess I'm not smart enough to reply the way others did, either....so, I'll just say, (in my simple little ole way), that I love reading your poetry, and this one was no exception.

Ethel

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

19 posted 2003-02-04 02:58 AM

what a picture you create!

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

20 posted 2003-02-04 03:17 AM

Ron...Enjoyed the contrast of love lost and found in this touching poem. Thanks for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

21 posted 2003-02-04 03:34 PM

You already know I appreciate the metaphor of the title...but this?

"We dreamed easy then
Slipping into silences
That were punctuated with lips
And ended in exclamations
As commas were placed on skin
That composed pages
Of passion"

Beautiful.

Just beautiful.

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