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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA 
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You yawn; A baby is born. Your tired; Someone’s fired. You try to sleep, your trying; A little girl is alone in her room crying. You start to dream, your flying; Someone is also lying in their bed; Dying. |
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seven_conscious Junior Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 33 |
nice job... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
I really liked this. Your told a concise story that beautifuly captured a mood. Eric |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
poohbear19 - nicely written, nicely told... BC |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
you managed to make me enjoy a short poem. considering i don't go for short poems, that pretty much means i like it. quick and has a great punchline, cool. keep on, keep on. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Andrea, I liked your first post. It's good. Also, welcome to Passions In Poetry. I hope you like it here. I look forward to reading more of your poetry.  Ethel....garysgirl [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-03-2003 12:27 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssssss) Oh Andrea, this is a powerful but saddening debut, sweet friend, it is beautiful to see someone born but another dying all at once and it can be tumultuous, this is wonderful, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Andrea, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Andrea, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice write! Welcome to Passions! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to Passions, ......please check your mail for a special greeting Charisma |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Karilea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Hope you enjoy your stay. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
hehehehehe.. as i write this.. .lots of stuff happened!! |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
Thank you all very, very much. Andrea |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
'Tis a slice of life, isn't it?...  |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
welcome. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
its weird, how so much happens at once. its easy to get caught up with the joy or grief in the moment.. but we don't often think of whats happening to all the others at the same moment. I like this, and WELCOME to the Blue Pages Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Poohbear19, welcome to passions i enjoyed your poem. |
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