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Dr Pepper Freak Member
since 2003-01-30
Posts 72CA |
REFLECTION Your face enters my mind as one would perceive a reflection upon the waters of an unflowing pond with the occasional ripple that would distort my clear viewing of your facial features I squint my eyelids slightly and I grasp for the image of your face Now becoming more distinct.... You are laughing... You are beautiful. An unforseen ripple moves across your face to dissillusionize as your image vanishes with this rippling effect of water I fear the departure of your laughing face from my thoughts. With your face now fading into nothingness a trailing tear makes its way across my cheekbone and the last glimpse of your eyes becomes extinct I try to recapture you and I squint for the lucid form of your face that once held its place in my mind Emptiness now surrounds me come back I plead! As the last sound of your laugh is vaguely heard off in the distance I remain standing in obscuration With one memory left.... A blur of your laughing face swimming before my eyes It's not the load that breaks you down, it's the way you carry it. ~ Lena Horne [This message has been edited by Dr Pepper Freak (02-01-2003 11:52 AM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
~Welcome To Passions~ What a wonderful first post. Can't wait to read more of your poetry. Last line, "swimming before my eyes" This, plus the entire poem, touching deeply. Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 . . . .   . . When I saw your reply on my poem, I looked for your post. No wonder, I didn't see it, you hadn't posted a poem, yet. This poem was worth the wait, though. It is really good, and I look forward to reading mor of your poetry. . . I know you will like it here, by the amount of the replies you've made already. You're going to fit right in with this big "family of friends"...... . .Ethel....garysgirl |
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Tari Miriel Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 69The state of mind |
If it is possible for one to see the compelling but ever elusive longing, I saw it vividly. You brought it to life in the rippling waters. I'm glad you posted. And it didn't even hurt, did it?  Tari |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to Passions,.....please check your mail for a special greeting. Charisma |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh my gosh, this is a lovely bittersweet debut, sweet friend, I have read so many of your loving replies and am so happy to see you posting, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much, now off to get myself a Pepsi as I am a Pepsi freak, LOL! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-01-2003 12:54 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your words are filled with lovely visuals and the missing of what may have only been a mirage. I've felt the ripples and have tried to hold on to a smile and the vision that reflects the laughter of happier times. It is beautiful what you wrote... Welcome DP~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to PIP. Nice entrance. Look forward to reading more from you. ThisDiamond |
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Dr Pepper Freak Member
since 2003-01-30
Posts 72CA |
Pat, thank you so much for reading and for your encouraging reply. Ethel, Im glad to hear it was worth the wait. Thank you for your kind comments! Tari, yeah, but only a little. The rest wont hurt as bad lol. Thanks for the encouraging push to post =) Charisma, thank you for stopping by and I did check my email, thank you!! =) Noah, I have been inspired greatly already and cant imagine how much more so in the time to come. Thank you so much for your comment on this, it does a heart good...(even if you are a pepsi drinker =) j/k just saves more DP for me!) BlueSerenade, Thank you so very much, I hope you enjoyed! ThisDiamond, thank you and I hope to read some more of yours as well! It's not the load that breaks you down, it's the way you carry it. ~ Lena Horne |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Much enjoyed your first post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dr. Pepper...Welcome to Passions! Seems that you've found the right way to go about our fair little community...Meet, Greet and say "see mine?"...You're going to like it here, that, I can tell! I'd send you a greeting card, with this lovely poem on it, but I can see that has been accomplished already! So...continue to enjoy yourself, and if you have any questions, just contact any moderator of your choice! Karilea |
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Dr Pepper Freak Member
since 2003-01-30
Posts 72CA |
Enchantress- Thank you, and I hope you enjoy the rest as much as this one! Sunshine- Yes, it seems someone has beaten you to it =) Thank you anyway and I will continue to enjoy myself here, yes. It's not the load that breaks you down, it's the way you carry it. ~ Lena Horne |
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