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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 "I am forever walking upon these shores betwixt the sand and the foam. The high tide will erase my foot-prints ... but the sea and the shore will remain forever." "We live only to discover beauty. All else is a form of waiting." excerpts from "Sand and Foam" Khalil Gibran ~*~ " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... if it finds you worthy ... it then directs your course. But if in your fear, you would seek only love's peace and pleasure, then it is better that you pass out of love's threshing-floor. But if you love and must need, let these be your desires: To know the pain of too much tenderness. To be wounded by your own understanding of love ... And to bleed willingly and joyfully ..." excerpt from "The Prophet" Khalil Gibran ~~~~~ Blued Brillance How do I redirect adoration and devotion? How do I cancel commitment and constance? Will I be able to breathe when oxygen is denied? Will I still feel the fire if the flame is extinguished? Where will inspiration come from if not intensity of emotion? I was never given the empowerment of this knowledge, this kind of confidence is beyond my capabilities. This emotional deliverance seems as improbable as my turning off the sunrise or silencing the wind. I lack the strength required to reverse the rain, to move a mountain aside, to turn away the tides. I possess no secrets of how to sequester the seasons. What would become of the sky if denied the clouds? What if the stars were stolen from the moon ... would midnight still retain it's magic? What if the tides were taken from the shore, if the waves were denied their constance? If the day was denied dawn, the night denied dusk ... would time stand still, would the seasons still change? Who holds these secrets, who is the keeper of the keys? For what feels like forever, I have believed it was you ... for so long now, you've been my axis, my gravitational pull. All this time you've been the one who turned the calendar pages, the one who promised the blue and the deliverance of the waves. Only your voice could ever compete with their calming constance. Not even the summer solstice captivated me as much as you in perpetual motion, leaving me as awestruck as I was by the ocean. No ... I don't begin to comprehend how to resist such brilliance, nor do I understand how to exist without such promised presence. I've no grasp beyond gratuity, no such securities of self preservation. Like shooting stars and the sustaining rain ... I only know how to fall. Yes ... I confess, I've fallen for the tides and all they told true ... as well as for the vulnerability of your horizon's endless view. This time I fell the farthest for the beauty of the ocean's blue ... most of all, I took the fall for the brilliant blues hidden in the hues of you. Janet Marie  If made to choose between the power of writing a poem or the ecstasy of a poem unwritten I would choose ecstasy In the end it is better poetry KG [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-30-2003 01:24 AM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Janet, When I saw your name I said: "Oh, goodie, I get to read a poem of hers" rather than a reply (all of which I am so grateful for, you've taught me much) Your poem has made me cry and cry and cry.....I just love it...sitting here still with lump in throat.... it is so touching and beautiful, in SO many parts I can't say anything else, except thank you for sharing it here. A masterpiece....(now I should go look up some of your poetry, soon as I get a good supply of kleenix) So enjoyed, Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Wowsa! Simply beautiful, I enjoyed each line and the pics took me there!! Great write!! Dennis |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow. You've written with such longing and such wistfulness...and yes..pain. I certainly felt this poem JM. Thank you for allowing me to read it.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 what an awesome amount of thought and work you put into this one! This is a keeper! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Oh, just when you thought she was done writing forever, here comes JM with another work of art for the Passions crowd! So she can still write after all. Had me worried there for a while, JM... and I was still skeptical reading this, usually when we come back from a long patch of no-writing, it's usually not right back into our highest quality work. I have to say though, this is quite impressive, and easily lives up to your standard. The title brought me back to Forever September, which I went back and read over again, just to get me in the mood for your work. Sometimes it's nice to warm yourself up, before reading something new... heh. You really must have a thing for blue. No wonder you're such a fan of piptalk. I have a few general comments. Things that bothered me, not necessarily things that were wrong with this at all, was the concentration of questions early in the poem. You obviously did that on purpose, so I'm not sure whether to critique it, but I personally think the questions could have done with a bit of explanation surrounding them. Maybe, they could have been broken up a little bit more, like you start to do gradually as you work yourself into the poem. quote: These are all great questions, but they came at me in kind of a close sequence. I had to pause at the end of each line in order to get a taste of the question fully, before moving onto the next line. I think you could have given that a bit more flow... Okay, my criticism is over... structure aside, the questions themselves are brilliant and thought-provoking. They seem to first challenge, and later examine the concept of moving on, old lovers to new, old commitments to new. It gave me a personal reaction, which is a really hard thing to do for me. Rhetoric is an excellent tool for bringing the reader into your world, because the reader's mind has an automatic urge to somehow respond. This is also a great way to start a poem, because it makes that reader-poem link early on, which strengthens the entire poem's message from that point onward. quote: There you go with the nature imagery. Are you one of those poets who sits on her roof at night and writes about the stars? Heh. Love the mix of metaphor here, the nature theme really gives your situation an element of the sublime, as something unmoving, constant and overpowering. You cannot reverse the rain, because you cannot change gravity. You do not have the secrets of the seasons, so it is foolish of you to try and sway your devotion and admiration. Lovely stanza, very well put forth. quote: I think that your organization of questions here is preferable to your first stanza. It's a lot more engaging and involving, and there's a lot more leading up to the questions themselves. "Would" is a great word to use when thinking of a way to enhance the effectiveness of questions. I see here, that you are continuing with your metaphor of the natural. Even if you could remove these natural elements from yourself, what would become of you then? A beautiful articulation of the feeling of unsureness associated with moving on. First, you feel that you are not nearly powerful enough to change what is unchangable. Second, even if you did possess the power, you would remain unsure of the consequences for acting upon it... in this way, you not only lack the power, you lack the will to change at all. It's sad how logical total apathy can be. quote: Here's the answer to my curiousity. I love the time you took to work up to this point, very much worth it. This stanza itself could have been the beginning of the poem, but you built up to it so nicely that by now, it's something I am completely absorbed in. So kind you are when feeding my curiousity.  I also have to say, you've done a great thing by keeping the nature imagery constant throughout. You might have devoted this poem entirely to the literal state of things, but instead you ran it through with oceans and waves. Just beautiful, a real treat for the eyes. quote: The last line of this stanza strikes me as the most important line in the poem, and I also feel it's the most brilliant. These are the kinds of lines that make history of a poet. Expect to be quoted on that in classrooms a few hundred years from now.  quote: Like the contrary echo of "No" to start this stanza off. I'm not 100% sure of its function, but I think it was important to show your transition from uncertainty to conclusion/acceptance. I like how you alter the nature imagery in meaning a little bit (from the sublime, unshakable and awe-inspiring to the beautiful, understood and admirable). This stanza is a bit of a shift, I feel, because it talks less of the remedy for your love, and more for the cause of it. It's a wonderful way to end, as it kind of takes us back to before the beginning of this poem, back to the positive in the past. In this sense it's a bit nostalgic, really. Just loved reading this, JM. You are so full of insight, I just love reading from you... write more, write often, and I'm still going to be here replying, like it or not. Your Friendly Neighbourhood Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling. I said that I thought this was your best. I stand corrected. I KNOW that this is... inspired, and full of wonder and anguish and longing and fulfillment, confusion and certainty, that pairs perfectly with your style of balances. "How do I redirect adoration and devotion? How do I cancel commitment and constance? Will I be able to breathe when oxygen is denied? Will I still feel the fire if the flame is extinguished? Where will inspiration come from if not intensity of emotion?" This did not confuse me in the least. Genuine heartfelt pleas--in the ache for balance. And all of this--ALL does a strike a chord of the physical in this reader--as they are the eternal wounds of humanity made fresh through your angst. and I do so love typing this next sentence: Baby, you bleed poetry.  love you Jan. This is you, written inside out.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I swear you just get better and better! This is full of rich images ranging from melancholy questions about life present and hereafter to inner fulfillment by comparing the past with the present. You're way too cool for your own good....Have you been quoted in a book or on national TV yet???? I wouldn't be suprised! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky and blue...James |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tried to slip this one in, thinking I wouldn't see it? Silly moth... I'll be back to read in depth... |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What if... All of those wonders... really began within ourselves..?? Beautifully written, JM... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, your writing is like the waves of eternity on the shores of forever. Do not ask of the art, you are a part. Sy |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
simply a pleasure to read, and read again--beautifully done and presented--enjoyed!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Believe me, little girl... you can't turn off the sunrise, and you DON'T want to silence the wind... trust me... and you just knew I'd know... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
JM, you are a joy to read! An amazing write by an amazing writer! I won't even try to pick and choose my favourite lines here.. It would disminish what I feel to be your best piece of work ever. And when I read your work I do feel every word of every line. Please grace these pages more often... I have much to learn...and this I am allowed to do from you. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
JM, How you touch my heart. I can't help but think of the song ebb tide. The inevitableness of your love and its consequences expressed in such bold analogies. Your heart so true, so determined, so constant and tender. Longing that I only wish I knew how to express. Yet longing expressed that becomes so personal to me. Your soul is so rich that it feels like eternity. I've been touched by an angel. One more keeper you bring to my collection. Bless you sweet friend for all you mean to me. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
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No ... I don't begin to comprehend how to resist such brilliance, nor do I understand how to exist without such promised presence. I've no grasp beyond gratuity, no such securities of self preservation. Like shooting stars and the sustaining rain ... I only know how to fall. OK mothy one... you talk about poetry and then show us how it is done.. this part caught me this bleeds poetry and longing... more please! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cap'n...make sure you moth her to death, will ya? |
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Tari Miriel Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 69The state of mind |
Ahhhhh, totally splendid! I hope to read more of your fantastic word landscapes and seascapes~ Tari |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie "I've no grasp beyond gratuity, no such securities of self preservation. Like shooting stars and the sustaining rain ... I only know how to fall." The above took me on such a powerful emotional level...the whole poem is fantastic, emotive and personal, yet, you speak with the universe behind your words and I think that is because you love with a depth that we all long for.  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Oh my gosh, you just have to post here more often, you are an amazing writer, sorry I'm late replying to this, I had a blast Tuesday evening at the Pepsi Center for the Tour De La Mangosta featuring Shakira! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, sweet friend, castles made of sand may slip to the sea eventually as hendrix himself said, but through the ebb a deeper shade of blue is inevitable, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Like shooting stars and the sustaining rain ... I only know how to fall. Your entire presentation is beautiful... quotes and pictures woven perfectly together with the skill of your quill. *S* But as excellent as the whole undoubtedly is, this line reaches another level... all the more appreciated because I can only see it from a distance. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Pat ... what a wonderful, sincere, reply...thank you so very much... you humble me and put a big smile on my face at the same time. Thank you for sharing your kindness. *S* Dennis... thank you poet sir, and fellow Missourian, for the read and the kind words. *S* Sharon ... if you felt it then I know Im doing something right *S* .. thank you for the wow and for sharing you with me. *S* Dixie ... Oh cool-- I just love being a kept moth LOL .. thank you so much for your enthusiastic reply. *S* Brian ... your insight never ceases to amaze me... you always see things I didnt even see in my own words...I think ya make me look better than I really am LOL... you nailed most of all I intended and then some... Yes..the blue is part of me now...this is a continuation of how my muse has found new life ever since my trip to the ocean, I pray the waves never stop speaking to my pen. Thank you so much for the time and in depth reply, as I have told you before...the gift of seeing our work thru anothers eyes allows us clarity we can see when we are emotionally attached to our work. And in essence thats the crux of this poem...its about my learning to accept that I am often ruled by my emotions and that they control how I react to everything... sometimes we need logic and detachment to be able to have balance. As for you always being here to reply...."like it or not" I wouldnt have it any other way THANK YOU!!KA .... yes...exactly baby.... balance... (not in a moths vocab) *S* Thank you me twin of heart...for always just knowing. Love you too girlie Eric... hey you!!!!!! Its sooooooo gooood to find your name here poet pal..miss ya around here....thank you for the high praise my groovy guy!!!!! SBJ ... silky and blue just like the ocean!! *S* Thank you poet sir. Kari ... me slip somehthing past the sun? no way *wink* Nan .... thank you so much, a " beautiful from you means a lot to mothy me *S* Sy-babers... you know us moths question everything *L* Thank you for seeing the waves in me words Stinkylove. Kari ... if the sun dont know..who would? *wink* thank you poetess of the warm. *S* TY for the pic help too Nancy... thank you so much for this lovely, gracious reply...yes isnt that the magic of this place..the way we learn and become inspired by one another. Thank you girlie for allowing my words to touch you. *S* Larry.... my goodness.. no fair making a moth cry *S* .. your reply is so sweet and so heartfelt by this grateful, humbled poet.... thank you seems too little to say for such a generous sharing of heart...Bless you for giving so much of you. If you were here Id give you the mothiest hug youve ever had Ron ... Oh...so you are gonna use a moths words against her huh? LOL ... MORE??? Ya mean I have to do this again???? rofl....my muse just ran out the door, I worked her too hard on this one. *L* thank you poet sir. Kari .. dont encourage him ... LOL are you two ganging up on the moth? *wink* Tari Miriel ... thank you for the "splendid" and for coming by...so nice to meet you. *S* Martie ... girlie...you make me mothy heart smile....thank you sweets for this wonderful reply...you always see right thru me and I love ya for it !! *giving you a big hug* Noah ... Im smiling at you .. thank you groovy guy for your enthusiasm and generous spirit. *hugs* ~~~ thank you everyone for your wonderful replies and support of my work ... ya make a moth feel like a butterfly *wink* My love to poetry land. jm If made to choose between the power of writing a poem |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ruthie...ya slipped in while I was left handed peck pecking LOL ... thank you girlie....me thinks you see more clearly than most thru the distance. Ya know us moths...we willingly take the fall *S* Thank you Ruth ... your replies read like poetry. If made to choose between the power of writing a poem |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Janet Marie, you have made me speechless, and you know that's not like me. All I can say is that this is absolutely beautiful....all of it, and I knew that I could learn a lot from you, but this is amazing. I've got to put it in my library, dear friend. Hope you don't mind. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
quote: When your muse lets you loose, you allow the rest of us flight... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
mothy words against you... sure....if you want me to write you have to... no more from me until I see one from you... I can always write them and just not share them...so..if you want to see them..you are going to have to write... that simple |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ethel ... you speechless? haha thank you so much for your lovely and gracous reply...I am so pleased and honored to be in your library. thank you much poetess!!Soleil ... my grateful thanks to you also poetess ... may I fly with you RON???????? Oh ahahahahaha for a minute there I thought you weren't kidding. You are such a comedian, why just the thought of my moody muse hinging on you posting again makes my side split in laughter.... we would ALL grow beards waiting on her to write as often as you and some of the others do... my my my... you are just too funny my friend  |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Beautiful poem. I love how you used the color blue- "All this time you've been the one who turned the calendar pages, the one who promised the blue and the deliverance of the waves." I loved those words. The color blue brings to the mind hope, peace, trust, and dreams... Blessings, El Campeador “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
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JM... kidding? Think so? we'll see.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
JM, please add me to your long list of admirers! Your writing is simply outstanding! ---and this piece is exceptionally fine! I think I'll go back and read it again!... P.S. I also love Khalil Gibran. I ever borrowed "The Prophet" from someone and wrote it out in longhand! Warm hugs, Linda |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
heart beats baby..... I can hear them clear over here oh, how you do what you do Janet, ever...always....so beautifully done. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And all I have to say is,"It's about time!" Now this was just "pure poetry" and I felt this one right down to the tips of my pink painted toes. Spendid work JM.~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~ |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
ahhhhh!!! your words are as close to a breath of fresh air one can utter! your poetry is simply soul astounding! * * * |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
El_Campeador ... thank you so much for your lovely, insightful, reply...Welcome to Poetry Land ... so nice to meet you. I look forward to reading your work. Capt.... are you trying to get a moth tarred and feathered and strung up in the forums???? If your posting depends on my scarce muse posting then we are both gonna be MIA. and besides...how am I gonna be inspired if I dont have your poetry to spark me muse??? OH well a moths gotta do what a moths gotta do....but it was a nice try anyway...I already saw your reply on a post this morn where you said it was your last one for a while... LOL... was that moth-child psychology you were trying to use on me moody muse Linda...thank you so much...so good to have you back in the blue... Mark B turned me on to KG's work ...lots of wisdom and truth in his words. thank you poetess for such a wonderful, warm reply. Susan ... well if you can hear me from way over there, then Im doing something right. thanks girlie for your enthusiastic reply...gotta give some credit to the ocean, its a whole new kind of pretty blue flame, lol Sharon...pink toes...well then they match your new kitchen...How Martha Stewart of you LOL...thank you dear poetess for your "splendid" reply. Manisha .... thank you golden sparkly one... your reply has a shine all its own ~~~ thank you everyone for you kind words!! If made to choose between the power of writing a poem or the ecstasy of a poem unwritten I would choose ecstasy In the end it is better poetry KG [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-31-2003 11:08 AM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
‘How do I redirect adoration and devotion? How do I cancel commitment and constance? Will I be able to breathe when oxygen is denied? Will I still feel the fire if the flame is extinguished? Where will inspiration come from if not intensity of emotion?’ This is my favorite verse. It perfectly poses the questions of what will come of loves bounty should its object no longer exist. Every line of this is perfect. ‘Who holds these secrets, who is the keeper of the keys? For what feels like forever, I have believed it was you ...’ The childlike sincerity of this line has made me smile, every time I’ve read it. 'Only your voice could ever compete with their calming constance.' Real. INYKIN 'Not even the summer solstice captivated me as much as you in perpetual motion, leaving me as awestruck as I was by the ocean.' As many days as I’ve spent on the ocean, as many times as I’ve been in love…I’ve never experienced the two together. So, you’re saying it’s nice, huh? 'I've no grasp beyond gratuity, no such securities of self preservation. Like shooting stars and the sustaining rain ... I only know how to fall.' To quote one of my least favorites of your expressions *W* …’moth anthem’ 'This time I fell the farthest for the beauty of the ocean's blue ... most of all, I took the fall for the brilliant blues hidden in the hues of you.' This line kind of has a treasure hunt feel to it that I love and that I think represents the whole of your experience. Knowing there was treasure to find but still so unprepared for the enormity of its power and beauty. And of course, without a clue how you’ll ever live without it…again. It was a great summer, huh? (You know, distilled this works out to 427 poems!) Love it when your heart talks Jams. Dunc [This message has been edited by Duncan (01-31-2003 01:00 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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Dunc...thank you so much for letting me see this one thru your eyes...and yes...now how to figure out to live without it and yes IKTYK now whats this about Moth anthem??? LMAO... never tell moths the things that bug ya...heh thanks groovy guy... and LOL at the distilled break down... does that mean I can repost it that many times and they will count?  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-31-2003 05:10 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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test of sig  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-31-2003 07:25 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Where will inspiration come from if not intensity of emotion?" "Like shooting stars and the sustaining rain ... I only know how to fall." A beautiful, breath-taking piece, Janet Marie. So very descriptive ... vivid imagery and emotion that flows so well from your pen. And the questions ... oh, you know I love the questions, JM. A thought-provoking ponder that digs deep inside to look for the answers. Very much enjoyed, gator-gal ... that ocean blue has given you many answers ... and ... beautiful inspiration. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit (PS ... loved the additional piece just above as well.) |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I'm glad this one came around my way. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
My mothy friend, these words... "I was never given the empowerment of this knowledge, this kind of confidence is beyond my capabilities. This emotional deliverance seems as improbable as my turning off the sunrise or silencing the wind. I lack the strength required to reverse the rain, to move a mountain aside, to turn away the tides. I possess no secrets of how to sequester the seasons." are as lovely as your heart, and move me in ways I can not express.. Thank you.....I must have had my momma's will |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
WOW.....this is breathtaking......the images with the poem really brought the beauty out. Excellent job. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
*** I was never given the empowerment of this knowledge, this kind of confidence is beyond my capabilities. This emotional deliverance seems as improbable as my turning off the sunrise or silencing the wind. I lack the strength required to reverse the rain, to move a mountain aside, to turn away the tides. I possess no secrets of how to sequester the seasons. ** Thank God, or this masterpiece might not exist! Why in the world would anyone want to silence the wind anyway? Never mind, I already know you are too smart to try that trick. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This poem almost makes Spam tasteless by comparison....almost. Too cool for school, Mizzou mama  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Missed this before, grateful to whomever brought it back for me to see. Simply put, it is beautiful. Thank you. Susan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kit-girlie...how Ive missed you round here...thank you so much gatorgirlsis...lol Im so glad ya got to see this one...still living off the beach breezes and the blue. So ya like questions huh? Well heres one...when ya gonna post some rhymes divine. *S* Eddie....and Im so glad you came round my way. ... thank you poet sir. Donna....somehow I just knew that verse would hit home...thank you so much groovy girl...mothy hearthugs back. Lisann ... thank you for such a lovely reply...so nice to see you back here in poetry land. Thanks for the wow *S* Kacy....yeppers..that would be like trying to keep a moth from flying into the flame.. LOL thank you girlie...have missed you round here...glad your back.Michael... ALMOST???? Well...Ok...it is SPAM after all....how bout better than Potted Meat? LOL... I knew Vienna Sausages would be pushing it .. thank you groovy guy...Spammy smooches to ya Susan ... and I thank you for the beautiful reply...so nice to have you stop in. thanks so much. *S* thank you everyone for all the wonderful responses to this...and for helping me celebrate my continued joy of inspiration found in the blue. my love to poetry land. jm |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
WOW.........this was beautiful. I was awestruck through the whole thing. Absolutely wonderful. had to read it a second time..... [This message has been edited by Lisann (02-05-2003 10:16 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you Lisann...a return visit and a second wow is an honor...ty so much |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This emotional deliverance seems as improbable as my turning off the sunrise or silencing the wind. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Once found, this sort of truth- or deliverance, can't be changed. The freedom to feel is just too real. Deb |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Janet Marie, this poem has got to go into Reflections on the Web... ~El Campeador |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and I love that little line from Gibran, so teeny I had to squint: "and to bleed willingly and joyfully" and that you do, yes'm, that you do. thank you for writing these |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Only your voice could ever compete with their calming constance. yesss oh yesss..sigh. Magnificent JM mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
man, I love the way these ladies bring up the best from the depths of Passions passionately *sigh* when I grow up I want to write like you |
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