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Jaime

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0 posted 2003-01-28 11:07 PM

Sometimes I look at his
face and his eyes, seemingly so
tired and full of regret, and I
wonder if he ever thought
that he wasn’t good enough
of a man

I wonder if maybe he ever thought
he should have been wealthy, and
on planes all over this world
I wonder if maybe he thinks
those things would make him
successful

I tell him about my own dreams
because he seems to believe them,
Yet with the kind of reservation
that comes with knowing defeat
And I wonder if he’s thinks that
it’d be terrible for me to turn out
like him

I’m leaving in four months
Away from my family, from any
ties I once had to my childhood
and I feel like I should go into
his office and tell him
what I’ve always known -

That I think that he’s a damn good man

1.28.03

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

[This message has been edited by Jaime (01-28-2003 11:32 PM).]

gypsy girl
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since 2003-01-09

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1 posted 2003-01-28 11:25 PM

I really enjoyed this, Jaime...sweet and sentimental in the best way possible. Nicely written as well; obviously from the heart -- thanks for sharing.

Jaime

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2 posted 2003-01-28 11:31 PM

I don't normally write like this (sentimental, sweet, mushy, etc), but this has been something on my mind for a while.

Thanks for reading.

(PS - I changed my reply to your poem because I reread it and realized what a shmuck I am. Sometimes it's hard for me to get past the word 'love' without a biased sneer, you know what I mean?)

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

gypsy girl
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3 posted 2003-01-28 11:33 PM

LOL....no explanation needed.

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-01-29 04:04 AM

awesome! well done! loved it

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2003-01-29 08:18 AM

and I feel like I should go into
his office and tell him
what I’ve always known -

That I think that he’s a damn good man
============================

this isnt mushy, its wonderfully honest and sincere...I hope you do tell him, or give him this poem.
A touching write Poetess Jaime.

Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky.
We fell them down and turn them into paper that
we may record our emptiness.

K.G.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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6 posted 2003-01-29 08:27 AM

I can't tell you anything off the top of my head that such a man would want to hear more..or that would stay with him longer.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-01-29 08:32 AM

You've done just that by now,
yes?

What?! NO?

Get in there girl!

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