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Eromyna
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0 posted 2003-01-27 09:52 PM



Do I need your external structure to keep me standing up?
Is it me that's so misguided? Am I really all that [edited by moderator]?
I feel this static distance, this space that holds me apart.
I can't reach out to feel you or touch you with my art.

I can't run away, for I'm already gone;
I'm alone in the dark. I'm the bittersweet one.

You can walk all over my soul, but I can't even taste your tears.
I thought it would change with time. I've been aching for so many years,
just to be swallowed into your sea, one more raindrop flowing aimlessly.
But I'm frozen to this fear that keeps me waiting here.

And you're an electric impulse, heat, energy and light,
epitome of purity. You're what keeps me awake all night.
I know there's something better, that sparkle in your eyes.
But all I hold is the pain I am, that rots me from inside.


"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-28-2003 09:59 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-01-27 10:35 PM


Shay, there is certainly lots of emotion in this poem. If this is you feeling this way, I'm very sorry and I hope things are better for you soon......
If it's just written from observation or imagination, you sure did have me fooled, because it feels like it's real......

Ethel

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2 posted 2003-01-28 09:53 AM




Hmmm. Not sure what to say except this is seriously real and heart touching.

I like this line, among others:

"I can't run away, for I'm already gone."

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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