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Poetic Bard
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since 2003-01-22
Posts 84
Canada, BC

0 posted 2003-01-25 05:34 PM


Crying,
Tears bled,
Blood shed,
All the love,
Dropping through,
The star lit nights,
As though the night knows,
That the wounds I've bled,
As with all the love thats gone unsaid,
Has drifted away as,
Every night I pray,
For a swidt decay,
Of this uman spent soul,
That has never been set free,
But,
As those words,
Will not be spoken,
I must say,
Goodbye,
Your spirit used to pull me through,
And every night I prayed,
That in the end of it all,
As the sun set,
And the moon rose,
And bloomed upon blood drenched stars,
To let all this love to be shown through,
But I don't think so,
Over and over you break my heart,
Putting me at a distance,
As these words,
Will not be spoken,
I must say,
Goodbye,
For,
Time and time again,
My blood drips to the ground,
Before it can be shared to all those 'round me,
So this is it,
I'm tired of this *censored*,
All this love that's gone to no ends,
By no bounds have I never not felt it,
By no bounds have your hounds not gone unfed upon it,
Unpon the fruits of my soul,
As each dream continues to be bled,
And because time and time again,
You let all the dreams I once had,
Go un shared,
These words,
The love,
The feelings,
Mean nothing,
And so I shall let all these words,
Go unsaid,
Washed away with all the things you said,
That used to run through my head,
Now not a single thought matters,
As these words,
No longer matter,
And so,
This all becomes drier,
As the blood flows a little bit easier,
Goodbye to you,
Goodbye to slow death,
Let the blood flow on,
Inspiration never again to go unspent,
Goodbye,
As all these words have been said,
Goodbye.


        Well, hope all you readers enjoyed it and hopefully my gramar/spelling is better.  Anyway, tell me what ye all think.

I bleed, you all read, and may the blood never stop spilling for loss of emotion would be all too damning.
~Joel

© Copyright 2003 Joel J. Harrington - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2003-01-25 05:39 PM


A very interesting presentation here my friend. Lots of good thoughts, literally bled down the page.  As free form, I don't usually have much to say in a critique sort of capacity. You have talent...I have found in my own write, sometimes less is more...as if in concentrate... Look forward to more.
ThisDiamond

Poetic Bard
Member
since 2003-01-22
Posts 84
Canada, BC
2 posted 2003-01-25 05:42 PM


Good point ThisDiamond, I think I'll give the idea of, putting more into something small, a try.  Thanks for your comments.

I bleed, you all read, and may the blood never stop spilling for loss of emotion would be all too damning.
~Joel

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