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...the Men from the Boys |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Jake and I got back into town a day earlier than expected as the look on Katy’s face reflexively betrayed. She hadn’t known how she was going to get herself out of this one, had only thought she had one more day. Clatter of breakfast rush a second before, silence replaced, or was it only in my mind? I felt the descent seconds before it began to make sense. I hadn’t noticed the truck with out of state plates parked across the street when we pulled up. In a town where nothing changes it’s easy not to notice when the ripples of a slow, easy river shift against the moon. It’s easy not to notice until you see it in her eyes. ....... ....... With Thanks to Ron for writing women that never fail to inspire me. /pip/Forum76/HTML/002193.html [This message has been edited by Duncan (01-23-2003 05:02 PM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Cowboy...you know you rock...  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Damn... |
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Poetic Bard Member
since 2003-01-22
Posts 84Canada, BC |
Cool piece, Sea's right, ye rock. Beneath, there is more beneath, but, what is there in the end? More beneath? Or something more? |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Duncan, I'm glad that you were inspired by Capt. Ron's women....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Duncan, c'mere... we need to talk... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
welll the idea i could inspire you and others to write anything is quite an honor.. heck... i just scribble stories and you guys..you guys turn them into art.. love this Duncan... nicely done... very nicely done. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I felt the descent seconds before it began to make sense. In a town where nothing changes it’s easy not to notice when the ripples of a slow, easy river shift against the moon. It’s easy not to notice until you see it in her eyes. ================================ I am so loving the imagery and the ache of this... Dunc...you need to keep writing these type of story telling poems...I am so diggin your long winded muse  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Great play off Ron's post! This makes for a great add-on thread. What happened to the blondes? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Duncan, this is lovely, sweet friend, I think we never fail to inspire one another as far as I am concerned, this is marvelous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
hmmm..... The husband's side of "Bridges Of Madison County," perhaps.... Nicely done, with a light touch and a feeling for feelings. This is the kind of work I hoped to find when I stumbled into this forum. ----------------------------- |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan Good one, enjoyed the read. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
kewllllllllllll!!!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Charisma |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Well, this just sizzles with suspense and hope you plan on continuing it... the next chapter leaving many possiblilies.... Enjoyed, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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