navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #24 » a tribute
Open Poetry #24
Post A Reply Post New Topic a tribute Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
AcousticBlue
New Member
since 2003-01-21
Posts 5
buffalo

0 posted 2003-01-23 02:02 PM


shadowed by day
as we slip through the vally
warped from the compromise
trade for our time
I feel the emptiness
rising inside of me
but I must digress
I know it's all in my mind

I am the prisim of
my own singularity
where all things converge
and then suddenly divide
I feel the emptiness
slowly encroahcing
but I must confess
you know it's all in my mind

couldnt you
and couldnt I
and couldnt we
have found out some other way
and couldnt us
and couldnt them
and couldnt they
have found out some better way
.
.
.
.
.
for seth
6-11-01  

© Copyright 2003 M.C. - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2003-01-23 02:23 PM


AcousticBlue
Perhaps, enjoyed the read.

garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
2 posted 2003-01-23 02:41 PM


Yes, probably so. I enjoyed your poem, even though it was kind of sad..

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

GG
Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
3 posted 2003-02-01 12:18 PM


I am the prisim of
my own singularity
where all things converge
and then suddenly divide


thats a powerful metaphor, I like it.
Though its somewhat stinging sad.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #24 » a tribute

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary