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Thisman Junior Member
since 2003-01-21
Posts 19 |
I am hunting for ghosts In these woods I have realized Why do you spend so much time out there She had asked You never kill anything Killing is not the purpose of hunting I had answered But I knew what she meant And so I turned it over In my mind For long hours I Thought about it As I walked the hills and creekbeds When I was a child I came here with my father (His hands were enormous He always wore workboots) As he hunted and fished But he died So I came here with friends To hunt and fish And drink and smoke And I came here with girls To do other things I remember marrying one of them And then I woke one morning and looked around And she was gone So I looked for my friends But their paths had carried them away From me So I waited And tried to make new friends And tried to marry again But something had happened I had forgotten how to be a friend Or a husband So I put people in those places Where friends and lovers should be For appearance sake And now I go to the woods Under an old log In a forgotten hollow There must be a note From my father Which explains it all Or maybe my old friends will be standing there Waiting Where ya been old buddy They'll say We've been looking for you all these years Or maybe she'll be there I was lost she'll say I knew you'd find me |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: Thisman, I'm going to enjoy watching your writing progress. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your e-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Thisman, ~Welcome To Passions~ This poem touched me so deeply I read it several times. You almost made me cry... Thank you for this and I look forward to more of your work. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (01-21-2003 09:21 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Hello and welcome: Your work sparked a thought of someone that I care about. Well written. Look forward to reading you. ThisDiamond |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Enjoyed your first post. Have fun here. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Thisman Junior Member
since 2003-01-21
Posts 19 |
Thanks all, you're too kind. It's my first try; I wrote it this morning after reading about Gregory Corso while doing some research on Beat writers. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thisman---so many emotions tied up in the depth of this, it caught me well until the end. Welcome to Passions! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
wow...I don't know what to say. It was for a lack of better words [edited by moderator] great. I look forward to future reads. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-21-2003 11:13 PM).] |
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Rodney Belcher Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 227Taylor, Michigan |
I know that hurt of losing loved ones. It gets better my friend. Writing is a good release and you do it well. Welcome and God Bless you...Rod Nothing ever happens unless first a Dream - Rod |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a wonderful debut that made me cry reading it, God Bless You and your compassionate heart, your loved ones love you so much I'm sure, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-21-2003 10:18 PM).] |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
This is a very sad poem... Im sorry man, im so sorry this happened to you I can only send my blessings, and my friendship.. You will always have friends here. This poem is going to go into my private library. Thank you so much for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Fantastic First Post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Welcome to Passions, Thisman. The part I enjoyed the most was what Sunshine pointed out. Overall, I love the honesty and thoughtfulness in this poem. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Jenn ~~I Love You~~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I think it's human nature to go back again and look for a reason that might explain our mistakes. I hope you find her waiting there. ~warm greetings, and welcome to you~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
nice, very nice and welcome |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Hello and Welcome, I too am rather new here! LOve this write!! Dennis |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Thisman... Welcome to our home here at Passions. I'm sure you will enjoy it here as we all do. Enjoyed your first post. To walk those same trails as you and your father did when you were still a young boy brings back memories to treasure.Thanks for sharing a treasured memory with us...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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