Open Poetry #24 |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I glimpsed the beauty of a rose Extended in a graceful pose As you presented it to me And two hearts beat in harmony I felt the wind, soft summer’s day I held your hand and begged you stay Then caught the love light in your eyes As lips on mine encaptured sighs ~ I glimpsed the beauty of a rose Four months gone by since you'd proposed You, debonair, in tux with tails And I in satin bridal veil I felt the wind, soft summer’s day In wedding gown and lace bouquet I pledged my vows, I said, “I do” And promised up my life to you ~ I glimpsed the beauty of a rose In solemn silence, head reposed It’s petals opening to view As casket hid last sight of you I felt the wind, soft summer’s day When clouded skies turned light to gray I cast the dirt with tear filled eyes There in the graveyard, sad good-byes ~ Ruth If God brings you to it, He will bring you through it. [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (01-20-2003 08:39 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ruth, You captured a lifetime in a few words, excellent write. Hugs PS. You could borow, A rose, is a rose, is a rose. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh so beautiful Ruth... Roses throughout a lifetime. Enjoyed the read. ~Hugs & Smiles~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Beautifully written Ruth. ~sighing in the moments memories~ M |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Ruth! For a title, how about "Rose Everlasting" or "Everlasting Rose", or something like that? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
OH, Ruth, What a beautiful poem! I read it several times and it became more lovely each time THis is exquisite Liz |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
A hoot of a read. Thanks. I like the rhyming of 'day' with 'bouquet'. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
This is beautiful I love the flow the images the haunting beauty its into my library now. as for a name "My Sweet Rose" possibly. Take a good look at my face |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Ruth, this is so beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry to imagine two lovers holding hands with a promise symbolized in the form of a rose! (kiss on cheek) I'd say From The Calyx To The Bumblebee is a pretty title, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ruth, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is really so very sadly beautiful and I never know if this is a current experience; if so, may you know continued strength and peace....and even if not, it is real enough to touch the hardest heart...I love it. Anyone who can write so wonderfully well can come up with a title, but it is a neat challenge to let the idea and various titles mull through my mind. I pass, and only want to say I enjoy your writing a great deal. Thanks, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
hoot_owl_rn - precious write, how about Beauty Of A Rose.... BC |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
How beautiful this was in it's sadness. You wrote it well, and it touched me. A lifetime of love and then loss. Thanks for the read. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful writing as always, Ruth. How about Life's Bouquet? The poem is excellent |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Rose Repose, Petals Of My Soul, Glimpse of a Rose, Roses are Blue, Wilting Rose,...and so on - and just a beautiful poem depicting the fresh to wilting rose of life. ~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow, thank you all for the great responses and many thanks for the excellent titles you proposed for me....now, to only narrow it down |
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