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babes684 Junior Member
since 2002-12-08
Posts 10 |
CHECK IT OUT TELL ME WUT U THINK... ANG ANGEL MLNPR Title: Always N’ 4ever 9/12/2002 Always N’ 4ever I’ve loved you from the start Always N’ 4ever I’ve loved you from my heart Always N’ 4ever You’ve made me feel alive Always N’ 4ever You’ve been there while I cried. Always N’ 4ever I see it dancing in your eyes Always N’ 4ever I’ll be at your side Always N’ 4ever I want your arms around me Always N’ 4ever Save the last dance for me. Always N’ 4ever Your’re the start in my sky Always N’ 4ever You’re the reason my heart beats Always N’ 4ever I’ll comfort you if you’ll comfort me Always N’ 4ever Together will ride the rough Waves of lyfe. Always N’ 4ever You walk in the room suddenly It’s brighter Always N’ 4ever Some how you make the moon Heart shaped Always N’ 4ever The ring you gave only made Us stronger more closer by soul Always N’ 4ever Some how or another you Make me smile. Always N’ 4ever You say cute things to make Me laugh Always N’ 4ever I’ll give you what you need To keep you happy & sweet Always N’ 4ever You’ll be my loyal friend Always N’ 4ever You’re my tiger ready to leap Keeping the harm away. Always N’ 4ever I find peace within your eyes Always N’ 4ever The world stops when You kiss me good night Always N’ 4ever When I’m with you I feel So free like a bird who just Learned to fly Always N’ 4ever I love to spending time with you In heaven. Always N’ 4ever I know you’ll tell the truth Always N’ 4ever Promised wont be broken Always N’ 4ever I love you Always N’ 4ever Will sore in to the Sun light leaven our Past behind. Always N’ 4ever I’ve loved you from the start Always N’ 4ever I’ve loved you from my heart Always N’ 4ever You’ve made me feel alive Always N’ 4ever You’ve been there while I cried. © Ang "02" |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
a very sweet write of love. although I would change the N to and. If you're going for a song effect, its a given that it will be said like "N", but for presentation...the and works better. Keep writing.  "My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
an overall good write, but repetitive, and the N and 4 just hurt my eyes. Don't mean any harm but that kind of writing is a teen thing I guess, and doesn't really get me going. |
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