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Thirsty
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Thirsty |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
We sat in Cafe Latte enjoying sips of each other we spoke of times thought long forgotten of years one after another your band broke up ever so slowly aseach member fell by the way-side bedding matrimony I went away to school to study crime giving no thought to anything else prepared to believe there was always time you and your Swisher Sweets cherry & vanilla we laugh as I remind you you still look like a playa we wonder about regrets about what might have been you give me your serious look ask if I still love your best friend we both know how he is paul my dear he is like a piece of talc that can't stand through the years which reminds me talc is often times used as a paint filler asa paint filler? yes as apaint filler, and eating paint chips makes you thirsty we both die laughing but I just die you never did miss what was in my eyes hours later we kiss goodbye promising to get together another time my lips taste like Swisher Sweets we both knew it'sjust a line I'm so terribly thirsty |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I surely do understand this piece... I surely do...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
enchantingvamp Wonderful write, enjoyed the read. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Leona, the question of what could have been, does tend to make one thirsty.....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
sounds like a bitter sweet reunion. You took me right there with you...very nicely done! ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
liked how you created this story , kind of different; liked it |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oooh excellent write here Leona! Much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely told and ending with those lines that make the reader pause to think...how thirsty am I? .... enjoyed... very much enjoyed this. |
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