The Nightwalker : A Sappho style poem

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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2003-01-09 09:00 AM

Watch the rise, yellow sun, shedding light of day
Feel the warm, repealing nightly cold with light;
See the crowds, now rushing here to there, away:
I wait for dark night.

Watch is pass, to zenith to descend in west,
See shadows, that were short now lengthen in reach;
See them cross, this barrow of hiding dankness;
My evil’s own crèche.

Watch if fall, dip below horizon ends day
Return cold, it’s creeping with the dark spreading,
See no crowds, now cower here and there, away;
Night’s here for dreading.

Out I crawl, in moonlight and starlight shining,
See the lights, barely there lighting way to go;
Feel the dark, release me and escape binding;
Day comes soon I know.

I journey, just watching all the world I’ve lost
My escape, from tether of living is paid;
The sunshine, it’s appeal of warm feel, the cost:
Of the choice I’ve made.

Gloom

Sappho a Grecian Poetess of the 6th century
is credited with the design of this form, although few of her works
survived the burning of the Library of Alexander.
The form is stanza of 11,11,11,5

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-01-09 09:11 AM

Professor,
Enjoyed this write especially
" I journey, just watching all the world I’ve lost
My escape, from tether of living is paid;
The sunshine, it’s appeal of warm feel, the cost:
Of the choice I’ve made."

Midnitesun

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Gaia

2 posted 2003-01-09 09:49 AM

Out I crawl, in moonlight and starlight shining,
See the lights, barely there lighting way to go;
Feel the dark, release me and escape binding;
Day comes soon I know.
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love this foray into the light of darkness

bluRaven
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3 posted 2003-01-09 11:45 AM

very wonderful poem, and imagery is great. Especially liked the last stanza!

"~Sometimes you have to forgive someone because you want them in your life."~~

regards2you
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4 posted 2003-01-09 12:45 PM

Enjoyed this a great deal and appreciate you pointing out the when and where of this form, which reads well. I, too, liked the last line...

warm regards, Pat

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Alwye

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In the space between moments

5 posted 2003-01-09 10:34 PM

I am vaguely familiar with Sappho...very neat that you went off of her format. I enjoyed the write very much, thank you for sharing!

*Krista Knutson*

"If we have no peace, it is because we've forgotten that we belong to each other." ~Mother Teresa

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-01-10 02:44 AM

learn somthing new every day...thanks for sharing

Paul Wilson

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7 posted 2003-01-11 04:53 AM

Gloom...Enjoyed the feel of this poem.

When writing in this form is the rhyme scheme always as you have it here? A,C---B,D or can it vary.
Also is the number of stanza's always the same?
I guess I could look it up for myself, but just thought you might like to educate some of us...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

[This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (01-11-2003 04:54 AM).]

CocoBaci
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8 posted 2003-01-11 11:58 PM

This is exquisite...
*~coco~*

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