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Knowing Winds Blow
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Knowing Winds Blow |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Knowing winds blow Across the plain of me Left beside the dusty trail Alone, you set me free Backs huddled, decision made Confirmation is what you need And while I stand here waiting I give you the blood I bleed You stand but do not walk away That is left for me to do A decision that I should go Was made alone by you I turn back once to watch good riddance dance of feet slowly feeling your decision was the beginning of my defeat |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Good write Sharon..full of such longing. I especially enjoyed the last stanza. Great closing... ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Bohemianaus Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 69Australia (South Gippsland) |
A very poignant piece - excellent writing and i love that there is awareness of the process of emotional development. You take the reader from empathy to sympathy. More please. Boh |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Wow. So well written and sad. Hate to tell you how much I enjoyed this. So creative, yet you were able to touch deeply. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like your opening stanza..."Knowing winds blow across the plain of me"... Among others, this is a great line...Nice work, PdV.. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
sharon, this is a very beautiful poem, even if it is a little sad.....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
truly sad...I love it |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon~ Ouch...this hits hard. I agree with Nan...there are some great lines in this, including the one she pointed out. Lots of emotion in this and it touches deeply. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
painful... but well done and showing a depth of feeling that I enjoy in writing... sometimes we do not know if the back is being rutned to us and feet are shuffling away or if there is a need for us too to turn around.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine You write so well, I always enjoy reading you. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
both pretty and pretty sad glad you don't write autobiographically very often JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Wow! You said it all in three words "knowing winds blow" Then I had to read it and fall out of my chair. Tis Good lucky Dale Speaking of ghosts, and after such an eternity. . .wouldn't you know, here comes mine again... |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Tender sad words full of loss and longing. Very poignant read. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Sharon - oooh, this poem makes one wince. Very well done. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Sharon, I know this feeling too, sweet friend, I listen to the winds for reasons of my own and it can be so discouraging how cold and blustery they can respond in the winter! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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