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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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Her number scrawled upon the inside cover of a dusty book dog eared and worn with age seven digits that make a grown man weep longing for distant days before he lost the boy [This message has been edited by Aenimal (12-15-2002 11:55 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I suppose it's hard to become a man and lose what youth was all about...and a fine girl she must have been then |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I read this three times... and felt three different meanings... well done! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wonderfully complex imagery here, Raph. Maybe 7 will still be a lucky number for you, another 7 maybe? |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
I really like this one. You convey your feeling very well. GOOD WORK! ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I believe the boy is still in you, but the girl may no longer be in her. Times change and so do people. I enjoy the way you write. It makes me think--but not too much--and for me that is a good thing! tehe ~ warm afternoon hugs Linda |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Raph, Enjoyed this much. Sad, but sweet. You wrote it well. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
7, yes i remember, 7 is fun for checkers, racecars, video games. but from what this girl rmembers, 26 can play all thru the night........es verdad? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
passing she was something else thanks sunshine rereading it myself I've found the same thing, totally unintended but interesting. Glad you enjoyed it Kacy 7 has not been in kind, in more ways then one but thanks for the thought Thank you salty i try Thanks Linda, I guess he's still milling around in there somewhere but he won't come out and play Thank you Pat always appreciate your comments inked if i got you're meaning right I'm blushing, if I didn't then I'm just confused and half stoned from another glorious day of work so don't mind me  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you got my meaning right, and why are yu just half, not totally, feed your head the other half,and send some over here |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
If i had some to send I would, i have Percocet will that do? They are for me at the moment..flying. BTW you have mail my servers down or I would've written sooner |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
There's something about that number, isn't there...? You've encapsulated so much here in a short write with wonderful phrasing, might I add. Made me picture strong writing such as "A Separate Peace". -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
=(.... sad, but it is a good poem... Thank you for sharing your feelings. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Mark A seperate peace? I must confess I've never heard of it please enlighten me. Thanks for the compliments and the continued reading Connel thank you very much raph |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very poignant, Aenimal. Cor |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thank you for the kind words Corinne i appreciate it |
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Laney Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 85Illinois |
Sad, but you have captured your true emotions. I enjoyed this poem, definately was a re-read! --Alana |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thank you Alana I'm glad you took the time to give it more then one read |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I am fast, fast becoming such a fan of your work....YES!!!! masterful.... Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thank you greeneyes too kind |
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