Open Poetry #24 |
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To Dance? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space ![]() |
I have felt your icy hand upon my shoulder twice before Asking me to dance the final dance The first between the pavement and steel of one who went a little too fast on a residential road but I declined but you took a tooth and bloodied lip as consolation The second time your touch a little more persistent It's frost seeped through bone and marrow Tainting the red river and bruising the land But again I refused and the compensation my pride in having to lie for fear and confusion What now my old friend Is it true that the third time's a charm? [This message has been edited by Aenimal (01-03-2003 03:29 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Aenimal - the third time could be the charm, but one never knows... BC |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Bill exactly who knows.. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (01-03-2003 03:28 PM).] |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, I saw LOTS of things written between the lines in this one. It's too early in your replies for me to say what I'm thinking....or maybe you may not even give any sort of explanation? I don't know if you're talking about yourself, or someone else, actually. Now, that means you're a very good poet, friend.... ![]() "Love makes the world go around" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Actually Ethel It's never too early to give an opinion or share a thought so be my guest. I'd written an explanation of this poem erased pulled it because i wasn't sure about the reaction I'd get not wanting people to think I was seeking attention or worse pity, this was loooooong ago and I'm fine now. It's just always left me wondering will their be a third and will i be forced to dance? |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I prefer you stand on the sidelines for a very long time. ![]() |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Aenimal In life there can be a third and maybe a fourth, fifth and sixth. LOL glad your over it. PS. good write. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
what, what? DWI, are u taking mass transit instead, or did i miss the bus on this? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Kacy nice of you to say You're right seymour but I'd rather not go through the worry and pain, or put anybody else through it for me inked death came a knocking twice i'm just hoping that there isnt a third |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad this was a long time ago...this is sad to me |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Aenimal, Sy is right. Also, don't lock yourself into thinking the third time is "it"...Someone else has a poem about using these down times to really think, appreciate what we have and hold our loved ones a little closer. Glad you posted this, for it does just that. And, glad this was awhile ago and sounds like you are recovered. We don't know what tomorrow holds so making our todays all we can is important. Forgiveness was also pointed out in noted poem. This is good. Wonderful reminder. Thank you, Pat ![]() ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Dixie I'm glad too Thanks Pat, oh I fully recovered the same year it was a rare blood disorder. I'm not locked into that thinking but the third time is a charm is a saying we often use, also in italy there's a similar saying so it was on my mind. |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy ![]() |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yeah, me too...I am glad you are over it.. and whatever chance it turned out to be... is probably OK... |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Sounds like your a fighter to me....and I myself have had a few dances. One really scarey one that took awhile to recover from(a broke neck from a car wreck)..But Hear I am and doing better than I ever thought possible. Enjoyed your take on this. ~Salty |
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visitvenus Member
since 2002-12-30
Posts 101PA, USA |
It's not how many times we dance - it's how gracefully we live between dances. Glad you're a wallflower now... -Venus |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Vandana Thank you Magnus it was a unique experience Wow Salty I'm glad you're okay i can't imagine what that must be like. I'm glad you're better and here to share your poems and thoughts with us Beautifully said visitvenus, I'm still learning to live it takes these memories to remind me sometimes. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Aenimal~ I enjoyed reading this. Very nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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