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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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0 posted 2003-01-02 04:01 PM



My Cloak

As I stand before the clear blue water

I wear my life’s cloak tightly around my body
I know that I should let go of my cloak,
and walk into the waters cleansing embrace
After all, my cloak is so miserably shoddy

I know I am responsible for its inferior condition
I know that I alone have woven it with a cheapness that has no taste
Yet I stand, clutching its familiarity,
scared to let go of what I have made

Scared to know if I could have done better
I scream for someone to rip it from me,
and push me to my rebirth
But I know it has to be me to let go

So a part of what I have always been
As I stand before the clear blue water
I stroke my cloak and wonder when


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Larry C
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1 posted 2003-01-02 08:36 PM


This poem expresses such stark vulberability. In my experience that takes much courage. Well done. Peace and hope to you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29
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2 posted 2003-01-02 09:49 PM


A brave post and a very human one. Brilliant and well done.

Gentle breezes,
Wafting through my consciousness.
A pleasant awakening,
Reminding me of the contentment's
Of my life.   ©spirit


  

passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-01-03 05:19 AM


nicely done
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4 posted 2003-01-03 06:57 PM


Well said,  and the cloak,  so symbolic of
our outer shell....that part of us that
protects...does all you have said...

I think it is much better repair than you
might elude to..

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