Open Poetry #24 |
My Cloak |
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
My Cloak As I stand before the clear blue water I wear my life’s cloak tightly around my body I know that I should let go of my cloak, and walk into the waters cleansing embrace After all, my cloak is so miserably shoddy I know I am responsible for its inferior condition I know that I alone have woven it with a cheapness that has no taste Yet I stand, clutching its familiarity, scared to let go of what I have made Scared to know if I could have done better I scream for someone to rip it from me, and push me to my rebirth But I know it has to be me to let go So a part of what I have always been As I stand before the clear blue water I stroke my cloak and wonder when |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
This poem expresses such stark vulberability. In my experience that takes much courage. Well done. Peace and hope to you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
A brave post and a very human one. Brilliant and well done. Gentle breezes, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely done |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well said, and the cloak, so symbolic of our outer shell....that part of us that protects...does all you have said... I think it is much better repair than you might elude to.. |
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