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We Are Set Apart
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We Are Set Apart |
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C_ROK06 Junior Member
since 2003-10-23
Posts 49 |
We are set apart from this world we live in Me and my friends, never again Never will we listen to what others say Never will we be embarrassed by the music we play I don't care what they think of us I don't care what they think they know For I know the truth And I've got to let it show Show them what I believe Show them what is right Show them the truth Show them the light What I do here matters In times to come What I do here matters Can't stand by and act dumb I have to help them Those that are lost I have to help them And bring them to the cross |
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C_ROK06 Junior Member
since 2003-10-23
Posts 49 |
-This is actually the first poem i ever wrote back in the 8th grade. Not that i'm much older, 10th grade and all. haha. I like what the poem is about, but my writing style has changed a lot since then, so to me... all the rhyming sounds awkward to me. what do you guys think? " So let us then try to climb the mountain, not by stepping on what is below us, but to pull us up at what is above us, for my part at the stars; amen |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
It's always a good thing to make a stand for what you know is right. It's not always the popular thing, but if it's right it's right. Nothing can change that. I admire, and applaud you!  Love, Terri~  |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
I like it as it reads. Of course, I am a rhyming poet and you might like to hear what non-ryhmers have to say. To me it is very effective as is! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have to agree, you got the point across nicely but if your writing is growing and changing you tend to be more critical of your own work. I liked it and the message. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
I have to help them Those that are lost I have to help them And bring them to the cross. This is what it's all about. helping, and when we do, we help in ways we don't even know about. But he does, and this is what will feed hope for the future. poe If nothing is something |
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earthdust Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 53predestined and foreknown |
very nice! i enjoyed greatly! ye are the salt of the earth... ye are a city on a hill that cannot be hid. no man lights a candle and hides it under a bushel, but puts it on a stand, so that it brings light to all that are in the house.let your light so shine before men that they may see your good deeds and glorify your father which is in heaven. -Jesus |
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whispering wind Junior Member
since 2003-08-18
Posts 45 |
This is really good especially since you wrote it so young. I liked how it flowed. Very good job and thanks for sharing |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) I understand this feeling ever so much, sweet friend, when many are young, they don't understand the greatness of His love because it sounds kind of abstract and many are mislead by His greatness but as time goes by then everyone can understand just what is good! (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a wonderful first poem, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth I can see the sun set and I perceive ***Live*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-01-2003 12:42 AM).] |
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C_ROK06 Junior Member
since 2003-10-23
Posts 49 |
thanx a lot u guyz. I really enjoy all the feedback everyone here gives me... it always gives me the courage to continue in my writting. thanx so much. God Bless -vik "So let us then try to climb the mountain,not by stepping on what is below us,but to pull us up at what is above us,for my part at the stars;amen"-MCE |
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