Spiritual Journeys #2 |
Lucifer |
Dream Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 10 |
There is no hate In this world of glass Only silence Fading, crying And we’re just faceless Fools; falling and trying to Fly with tattered wings There is no love For our leering masks Only whispers Mocking, lying And we’re just broken Mannequins; dancing, dying On bloody strings I tried to plead But they stole my voice I tried to love But they took my heart I tried to fly But they broke my wings |
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niftywidow Junior Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 12South Carolina USA |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry. I really don't understand your poem and the correlation to the title of it. But then what do I know? Isaiah 40:31 They that wait on the Lord! [This message has been edited by niftywidow (03-16-2003 02:30 PM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I do believe that lonliness and lack of faith are indeed tuned to the vibes of Lucifer. I hope those will listen to another song Welcome and please check your email for a special surprise welcome from us here at Passions. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Welcome to you. You've come to a happy place. Your next poem will probably be happier. Joyce |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-17-2003 02:12 PM).] |
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maybe_one_day Junior Member
since 2003-03-17
Posts 23Canada |
Great imagery, gave a vivid picture to me. I think I understand what you are talking about, or at least I received a very clear picture as to what I think it is about. All of my poems have a somewhat similar underlying message to them, the one thing about the world that I think, if changed, could make amazing difference. Thank you. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Welcome!!! I can tell that you are one who chooses your words carefully when you write and this adds to the intensity of your poetry. Very intense and emotional writing accomplished here in a very short space. I think that you have made some very good points about Lucifer and his world. A world of self, self gratification, lies, deceit and heartless bondage. Very well described here, I believe. I thought your explanation that we are like Mannequins to be very descriptive of how it is and/or must be to be under the powers of Lucifer. Again, very good and descriptive writing and a Great Big Welcome to Passions and Spiritual Journeys from me. -Bob |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Hi Dream, Well, your poem seems to acknowledge the dark side. Which is real and intrusive. But the poem also is flavored by the most powerful, that of which is love in the universe. The poem also suggests that, although knowing of the such (darkness). Our faith is what is needed for true guidance and salvation from the trap which lingers. Your thought intentions are very deep. I call this bravery as long as one doesn't lose the real perspective involved. Because of this you are capable of producing a lot of magic. mysticpoe |
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Dream Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 10 |
Thanks for the compliments,all.However,I think that most of you have misinterprated this poem...it's meant to be a piece that is written from Lucifer Morningstar's point of view.(And no,I'm not a christian, in case any of you were wondering.)Your feedback is very much appreciated,though.Perhaps I'll do something about the poem's ambiguity... |
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