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River Goddess
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River Goddess |
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Markus Junior Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 22 |
veins streaming through our great mother earth like evolution & all life she branches out twisting and turning finding way through valleys, carving away mountains and stone singing and whistling drop by drop under the sky in the end nothing stands in her way as she meets her destiny, only the ocean can swallow a poison river and not become impure |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
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this is wonderful!  Welcome to Pip  |
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Markus Junior Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 22 |
thanks for your kind words, the last 3 lines of the poem were inspired by nietzsche zarathustra and wanted peoples opinions whether or not it flows properly with the poem, or causes a kind of abruptness or out of placeness (for a lack of a better word). |
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SEA
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I think it works fine |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved those last three lines! Welcome to Passions, and enjoy your writing here. Please check your email for a nice surprise welcome.  Happy Holidays, Love Mysteria |
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Markus Junior Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 22 |
thats for the lovely surprise mysteria, sent you an email asking for help instructions on how you did that |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
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Markus, look on the right side of your post, or any post. It has like paint melting, and says ecard. Click on that and just follow the instructions. It's clear and it's really easy and fun! |
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Markus Junior Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 22 |
oh I like this feature very much, who ever came up with this creative function deserves many warm thanks |
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SEA
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I know, right?! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Way cool first post!!! I liked the analogy of the river. Hummmm, destiny does always seem to lead to something much bigger, much bigger than we. I love that thought. Good job, Welcome, and God bless, -Bob |
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Markus Junior Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 22 |
this amateur poet loves such thoughtful words from everyone |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
51 more and you've got it!  |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Very beautiful! really, I think of how the time would stop right there, and let me enjoy the moment. May good moments last forever... very good piece of writing |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Welcome! I, too, enjoyed your piece and like the ending. God bless, Rae |
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Tom Zart Senior Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 682 |
Dear Markus, nice to see a new angle in the tree your work sings. Tom Zart |
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Markus Junior Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 22 |
Amateur poetry is a passion for me that provides me with great happiness. Thank you all for your kind words and for making me feel like a rock star ;p |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Markus. Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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