The Underdog's Requiem...an act of desperate vindication and religious fustration

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The Underdog's Requiem...an act of desperate vindication and religious fustration

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since 2007-05-27

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0 posted 2008-12-15 08:31 AM

The Underdog’s Requiem …an act of desperate vindication and religious frustration
In the Beginning God created the heaven and earth
And the earth was without Form and void…
It was fundamentally humanoid…
Sigmund Freud suggested the impulses of the unconscious mind
Presupposing predetermination and the influence of something divine
And the spirit of God moved upon the face of the waters
I lament about the world we will be leaving to our sons and our daughters
I fathom the fathom that is ever growing , mindful of the threat of Global warming
Why is  there tidal water where it should be snowing ?

We concede we need to promote the conservation of energy
So instead we violently seize  it  from the “pagan” enemy
The LAW of conservation of energy  provides matter can neither be created  or destroyed
So this would mean that human  beings  don’t “matter”
As countless lives are flung away like insignificant war toys
And then God said let there be light : and there was light
The gift of sentience  was  strictly a human delight
And this “light” of “superior” intelligence would automatically make it right
Whenever we decided or found the need to fight

And God DIVIDED  the light from the darkness
Was it on this ground that our condescension and discrimination was harnessed ?
Jihad, Lebenstraum, Reconquista and Providence justification for blatant intolerance
And as the light  broke the darkness , Saul’s blindness was cast away and Paul opened his eyes
To heed his calling
I too took up the “good fight” and sought to make a change
And with failure upon failure my dreams grow deranged
Are the challenges we face stumbling blocks according to God’s will
Or as predetermined beings  , are we simply puppets being pulled for his thrill?
I WANT TO DO HIS WORK!

Albert Einstein purports that the significant problems we face cannot be solved at the same level of thinking we were at when we created them.
So we strive and contrive
Technological advancement
The way of the civilized
Cementing our own demise
Bigger and faster cars are like salt to the scars, of everyone
That lost a loved one …
To a road fatality
Ashes to ashes …dust to dust
The Carbon monoxide takes it’s residence within us
This merciless assault on the ozone layer is combustious
Our preoccupation with capitalizing is noxious

It’s true the  Bible is flagrant with superficial and rationalized contradiction
Therefore let  me confirm my religious affiliation
By employing a contradictory exemplification :
For the Lord thy God is a jealous God yet
He so loved the world  that he gave his only begotten son that whosoever
Believeth in him should not perish but have everlasting life
As this message consoles me in my time of strife
I must further stress the beauty
Even Jesus himself experienced religious insecurity
Exclaiming on the cross : “Father …Father  Why have you Forsaken me ?”
Yet he died for our sins with his faith intact
What’s so confusing about how we must act?

Newton’s third law of motion asserts that  for every action there is an equal and opposite reaction
With this we can comprehend how an act of love can resonate
And manipulate ..ultimately moving someone to hate
I grow weary and my pupils dilate
Science is no yardstick for the human soul
So from physics I move onto ethics
In hope I could find a resolution to my conflicts

I claim expertise in ignorance
An overwhelming cognizance
Of my incompetence
Ethics looks at how we ought to live amongst ourselves
In observing Plato’s absolutism there can be only one good
Existing independently of culture , creed and neighbourhood
Therefore what’s right in Nazi Germany could be right in another
My Conflicts mutate my being starts to shudder
Aristotle highlights our hedonistic nature :
Some  interpret goodness in terms of pleasure
Doing whatever it takes to achieve personal happiness
Irregardless …
Of who we distress

My hope starts to collapse
Cynicism attacks
Is the world fundamentally evil ?
With this apparent established evil was our benevolent God content to stand still?
Was our unmoved mover oblivious to our peril?
I admit it was only human cruelty that spawned things like brutality and murder
But who was accountable for natural disaster?

Surely an all powerful God wouldn’t allow flood and fire to taint me
As I ramble on I’m struck by an epiphany
It is because of God’s goodness that evil exist!
Because evil exists we can be good!
Our free will , a gift by God demonstrates this!

For us to make choices there must be alternatives
The existence of evil and God aren’t opposites !
And as I bring my ponderment  to conclusion
I assert that God lives
His benevolence is no illusion

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Vestibular Bard
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since 2008-12-11

Posts 284
New York

1 posted 2008-12-15 09:38 AM

Dearest Kevin

Just some friendly advice...

For a poem to have any impact on anyone... other than the author...

...it has to be read.

In order for a poem to be read, it has to be readable, reasonably concise, and coherent.

Please ask yourself if your poem was any of these three things.

Now then, perhaps you have enough material here, for 20 poems, or a lifetime of poems... my adivce would be to take but a single line or 2, in your quasi-religious rant above, and turn it into 8 lines of something simple, concise, coherent, and perhaps even something that is pleasantly metered.

For example:

I lament about the world we will be leaving to our sons and our daughters
I fathom the fathom that is ever growing , mindful of the threat of Global warming
Why is there tidal water where it should be snowing ?

Can be turned into this:
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